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    Right, about 5 months ago I wrote a little Fanfiction crossover between, Static & Spiderman based off the ultimate universe and DC.
    It's formatted a certain way because I actually planned on drawing it. However it's not standard format because writing panel by panel would be tedious since I would already be drawing it. So I wrote it by scenes instead.

    http://www.comicvine.com/forums/fan-...spider/653006/

    I don't think I'll continue it, I might if you guys like it. I want to create a new world of original superheros, like the ultimate universe, but with a twist.
    I just want know the level of my writing. If any you guys are interested in creating a new universe lemme know.

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    AHAHAHA!!

    Your Spidey is hilarious! He does jump to conclusions quickly in the comics, so I was not surprised he thought Static was a black Electro.

    The teenagers' voices did sound a little too alike though and Peter didn't sound much like Ultimate Peter, but his interactions with MJ were spot on. I also enjoyed Peter's scenes with Virgil and likewise their dialogue on Frieda's non-stop talking.

    "Meta-phobic" as a word was brilliant! Akin to flatscan, mudblood and muggle.

    I also did some fan fiction, but using Ultimate X-Men instead. Mine can be found here: http://forums.comicbookresources.com...el-Fan-Fiction
    Last edited by MrV; 08-01-2012 at 03:55 PM.

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    I started a UU reboot project and made Spider-Man but nobody else was interested. Are we starting this universe from the ground up? If so, I would love to continue your Spidey. Just tell me if interested.
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    Quote Originally Posted by MrV View Post
    AHAHAHA!!

    Your Spidey is hilarious! He does jump to conclusions quickly in the comics, so I was not surprised he thought Static was a black Electro.

    The teenagers' voices did sound a little too alike though and Peter didn't sound much like Ultimate Peter, but his interactions with MJ were spot on. I also enjoyed Peter's scenes with Virgil and likewise their dialogue on Frieda's non-stop talking.

    "Meta-phobic" as a word was brilliant! Akin to flatscan, mudblood and muggle.

    I also did some fan fiction, but using Ultimate X-Men instead. Mine can be found here: http://forums.comicbookresources.com...el-Fan-Fiction
    Heh, Thanks for the critique, I'll take a look at your stuff.

    Quote Originally Posted by Darman456 View Post
    I started a UU reboot project and made Spider-Man but nobody else was interested. Are we starting this universe from the ground up? If so, I would love to continue your Spidey. Just tell me if interested.
    I done with fanfiction for now. I'm planning on making an original universe of superheros.
    Last edited by ActionSage; 08-03-2012 at 03:51 PM.

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