William Feist Paranormal Investigator (webcomic)

[kingvmr]

Hey guys. I figured this would be awesome place to show off my webcomic. our goal is to get better at it with each new issue and I would love to hear what you guys think about what we have so far. Thanks in advance.


Link: http://olddyingkitty.com/William_Feist/?p=216

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[Capsizing Heart]

Just read the first issue and I actually really enjoyed it.

Admittedly though I have a few complaints.

Firstly, it's cliched up the butt and I don't really mind cliches like many people since cliches are cliches for a reason but I could see very few of your own ideas between the cliches and that is a problem. Like why should I read your webcomic as opposed to reading Hellblazer or watching Supernatural?

Plus something felt off about the dialogue, but I couldn't work out what it was. This wasn't helped by how cluttered you made the dialogue boxes. I understand you have limited space, but when you're trying to fit about 10 speech bubbles in one panel you have a problem.

Positives though, the artwork was flawed, but compared to most first issues of webcomics I've read that make my eyes bleed and cause me to rock backwards and forwards in the corner in terror, this was a real beauty.

I really liked William as a character too. And the humour genuinely made me chuckle. There were some clever pop culture references and the action was nice. Plus I'm a sucker for these sorts of stories.

[kingvmr]

Thanks a lot for the feedback. I really appreciate it and we are working hard to make the comic better and better. I personally am really trying hard to make the comic unique with my sense of humor and my own take on this kind of genre.

[kingvmr]

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[Capsizing Heart]

I'm just about to start the second chapter but I must say as a comment on the cover, are they meant to be punching each other in the crotch? Haha.

[kingvmr]

It didn't start out that way. It was a mistake, but I thought it too funny not to use. Like the old unintentionally funny comic book covers

[Capsizing Heart]

Yeah it was a good cover, if unintentionally hilarious. Haha.

Anyway, critique of the issue, is that a Seventh Seal reference? Awesome!

Anyway, another great issue! The artwork was great, the action was fun. Admittedly I think the influences are still a little overbearing, I'd like to see more of your ideas than your influences.

But it looks like the 'proper' story starts here and I'm excited.

[kingvmr]

Yeah it was a good cover, if unintentionally hilarious. Haha.

Anyway, critique of the issue, is that a Seventh Seal reference? Awesome!

Anyway, another great issue! The artwork was great, the action was fun. Admittedly I think the influences are still a little overbearing, I'd like to see more of your ideas than your influences.

But it looks like the 'proper' story starts here and I'm excited.

Yeah 3 and 4 is when we start to settle in and start going down our own path and I so happy someone finally got that Seventh Seal reference!

[Capsizing Heart]

Yeah 3 and 4 is when we start to settle in and start going down our own path and I so happy someone finally got that Seventh Seal reference!

I'm looking forward to reading them! And wow no one got the reference, for shame! Made me smile how uniquely William the scene became. Lots of microdetails to the character, it is awesome.

[kingvmr]

I'm looking forward to reading them! And wow no one got the reference, for shame! Made me smile how uniquely William the scene became. Lots of microdetails to the character, it is awesome.

I'm really happy you're enjoying it. Hopefully the other characters that show up grow on you as well

[kingvmr]

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