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    Ages upon ages ago, I wrote a story for my short lived anthology that was slated for issue three. The book lost funding and we had to scrap it, so there was no issue three. I ended up with a story on my hands. It was first drawn by one friend, but then another re-did it for reasons I can no longer recall.

    I've never gotten it published. I've shopped it to a few anthologies but it never really "fit". I have parts of it on my site as samples, but have only posted the whole thing in one place.

    I've decided to post it here.

    Ladies and Gentiles, I give you The Last Word. Sory by Mordechai "Typo Lad" Luchins and art by Jason Whitley.

    Please, savage it!
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    What WERE They Thinking?
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    "My G-d, guard my tongue from evil, and my lips from speaking deceitfully" (Psalm 34:14).

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    What WERE They Thinking?
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    "My G-d, guard my tongue from evil, and my lips from speaking deceitfully" (Psalm 34:14).

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    Please note that this story is a decade old now.
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    "My G-d, guard my tongue from evil, and my lips from speaking deceitfully" (Psalm 34:14).

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    Thanks for letting us see this, Typo!

    I've always loved stories in which characters start arguing with their creators. (The artist pleading to be left out of the argument was a very funny touch)!

    Let us see more!!!

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    Thanks RR.

    Page 6, panels 1&2 are reversed. Never noticed that before!
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    Ha! Ha! I could have told you women were trouble.

    So is it savaging you want, or validation? Or does the former imply the latter to you?

    Damned masochistic writers!

    I just want to say that I actually know someone exactly like the female protagonist in this story.


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    Quote Originally Posted by Typo Lad View Post

    Page 6, panels 1&2 are reversed. Never noticed that before!
    Neither did I, because even reversed these panels make sense: first the lady complains that she's not a looker, which might be interpreted as an attack on the penciller (she might be suggesting that he can't draw pretty women). Whereupon you defend your penciller, saying that the attack was uncalled for, promoting the "did I hurt your ego?" question.

    In any reading order, I enjoyed that tale and look forward to see more like it!

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    mutter mutter mutter Stupid website blocking technology mutter mutter mutter

    I'll check it out this weekend. Can hardly wait.

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    Fabulous. Very funny and well drawn.

    First panel is a bit like the first panel of my Earth Man comic.

    You should be proud of this, old or not.

    Second panel is far out. Love it.

    Can we see some more?

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kara Zor El View Post
    Fabulous. Very funny and well drawn.
    Thank you! Jason Whitley, the artist, is just great. Has an amazing range of styles and is fast too. Nice guy as well.

    First panel is a bit like the first panel of my Earth Man comic.
    Linky?

    You should be proud of this, old or not.
    Thank you. In some ways I'm very proud of it. 18 year old me didn't suck.

    Second panel is far out. Love it.
    Do you mean second page? Either way, thank you.

    Can we see some more?
    Hmmm....

    I have three more finished stories lying around. One's kind of dark and the other two need scanning.

    I'll get on it.
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    Nice to see some comic work on these boards that isn't super-hero work. Nice work, Morts.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Typo Lad View Post
    Thank you. In some ways I'm very proud of it. 18 year old me didn't suck.
    I can barely write that well NOW. Funny stuff, Morts.
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    Default Great Work!

    Those splash pages are very Eisner-esque.

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    Quote Originally Posted by thespianphryne View Post
    Ha! Ha! I could have told you women were trouble.
    Preach it, sister.

    Quote Originally Posted by thespianphryne View Post
    I just want to say that I actually know someone exactly like the female protagonist in this story.
    Someone?




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