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[QUOTE=Hazard;16358211]In a land of esoteric abilities, Robert still punches people with giant rock fists.[/QUOTE]
WBX is slightly uncoventional, though. :P
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358212]Unconventional indeed. Given that he's imprinted quite a bit on Elewa, it's surprising a contradiction in beliefs hasn't popped up yet for him to mull over.
I mean, he had a lot of time to think in the desert. But now that he's in a more rational state, surely something new would come to mind.[/QUOTE]
The trick is, Elewa kind of wants to [i]be[/i] Sizwe.
Sizwe is tall, athletic, charismatic, great at talking to people and has the kind of effortless charm mixed with minor intimidation that Elewa wishes he could do.
He knows that Sizwe isn't a good role model but... he kind of has a real blindspot when it comes to him.
It's going to come down to whether Sizwe is actually a good man or not. Which is an... ambiguous area to say the least.
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[QUOTE=FarBeyondC;16358214]And everyone loves / envies him for it.[/QUOTE]
He will, sadly, get a bit more esoteric in the future though. At least partly.
[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358215]WBX is slightly uncoventional, though. :P[/QUOTE]
But is has an awesome scarf!
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[QUOTE=Nik Hasta;16358235]The trick is, Elewa kind of wants to [i]be[/i] Sizwe.
Sizwe is tall, athletic, charismatic, great at talking to people and has the kind of effortless charm mixed with minor intimidation that Elewa wishes he could do.
He knows that Sizwe isn't a good role model but... he kind of has a real blindspot when it comes to him.
It's going to come down to whether Sizwe is actually a good man or not. Which is an... ambiguous area to say the least.[/QUOTE]
Nothing wrong with ambiguity.
Elewa should get introspective on his idolization of his brother, though. A more thorough examination of that relationship would be nice to read.
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358267]Nothing wrong with ambiguity.
Elewa should get introspective on his idolization of his brother, though. A more thorough examination of that relationship would be nice to read.[/QUOTE]
I'll do what I can. ^_^
Besides, ambiguity is fun!
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[QUOTE=Hazard;16358256]He will, sadly, get a bit more esoteric in the future though. At least partly.
But is has an awesome scarf![/QUOTE]
True, true.
I suppose I'd count Robert as one of the Conventional Crew.
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[QUOTE=Nik Hasta;16358268]I'll do what I can. ^_^
Besides, ambiguity is fun![/QUOTE]
Meanwhile, I am still suffering from Rooftop Syndrome.
But it's hard for me to not give away some important stuff if I don't merely insinuate.
I need your advice, Nik.
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358275]Meanwhile, I am still suffering from Rooftop Syndrome.
But it's hard for me to not give away some important stuff if I don't merely insinuate.
I need your advice, Nik.[/QUOTE]
Feel free to hit me up on PM.
Or on Anima if you're concerned about post length limits and inbox sizes.
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[QUOTE=Nik Hasta;16358287]Feel free to hit me up on PM.
Or on Anima if you're concerned about post length limits and inbox sizes.[/QUOTE]
Nah, it's just general advice about how to avoid Men on Rooftops. Nothing that needs to be private, I figure.
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And it looks like I'm being dragged away for something annoying.
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358363]Nah, it's just general advice about how to avoid Men on Rooftops. Nothing that needs to be private, I figure.[/QUOTE]
Arright, what's on your mind?
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[QUOTE=Nik Hasta;16358393]Arright, what's on your mind?[/QUOTE]
Well, when I write, I can't figure out any way to avoid giving out crucial details without blatantly hiding them. I need tips on how to be more subtle in my writing.
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358416]Well, when I write, I can't figure out any way to avoid giving out crucial details without blatantly hiding them. I need tips on how to be more subtle in my writing.[/QUOTE]
This is... a pretty contextual thing since it really depends on what the details you want to hide/allude to are. I mean, it's always tricky, trying to strike the balance between preserving a character's mystique and giving hints as to their true nature. Obviously, the easiest thing is for them to be totally indecipherable just so you can go; "Haha, didn't see that coming did you!" but that's kind of shitty writing.
There is... a limit to what I can tell you without details here to be honest. Use metaphor, allusion, attempt to draw parallels between the situation your character is in and the information that you are planning to reveal... this is all vague stuff and if I have more information I can get specific.
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[QUOTE=Nik Hasta;16358461]This is... a pretty contextual thing since it really depends on what the details you want to hide/allude to are. I mean, it's always tricky, trying to strike the balance between preserving a character's mystique and giving hints as to their true nature. Obviously, the easiest thing is for them to be totally indecipherable just so you can go; "Haha, didn't see that coming did you!" but that's kind of shitty writing.
There is... a limit to what I can tell you without details here to be honest. Use metaphor, allusion, attempt to draw parallels between the situation your character is in and the information that you are planning to reveal... this is all vague stuff and if I have more information I can get specific.[/QUOTE]
Eh, I can work with vague. Thanks, I'll figure something out with it.
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[QUOTE=Eternal Torment;16358488]Eh, I can work with vague. Thanks, I'll figure something out with it.[/QUOTE]
No problem dude, you're a fine writer. Sloane is, or rather has the potential to be, an incredibly complex character. You've set yourself a pretty serious challenge.
