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Super Hero Guy
10-28-2005, 07:49 PM
Okay, I've been working on this story idea for months and months, almost a year. Despite this I haven't written a word of it yet other than a couple of rough notes. This is because the story I'm writing requires a very complex world and it spans several decades. I have no plans on ever actually writing this unless some time in the future I can ever spend all my time writing, because this would be an epic. Here's a brief sypnopsis. I haven't actually filled in all the gaps in the story yet, so bear with me.

It's a Fantasy story, in the same vein as Tolkien (except without the hobbits, elves, and dwarves.) Actually, I think Fantasy might not be quite the right term. It's also inspired slightly on The Odyssey.

The first sentance I believe would be, "There once was a village surrounded all about by trees." The village is called Puniz, and it is based a bit on The Shire. The people have lived here for as long as they can remember, it is surrounded by acres and acres of forrest. The people know there is an outside world but don't actually know anything about it or try to find out. They live in normal peaceful lives.

The hero of the story is Abec Hygufodi. As the story starts he a regular seven year boy. He is filled with curiosity and an adventerous spirit. In fact, he is first seen with a group of friends playing. The other friends have all climbed up a small tree and are sitting in the branches. But Abec is unsatisfied with that tree and insteads turns his intentions to the largest tree bordering the village, a monsterous old tree. He climbs on despite the protest of his friends down below. Finally, almost at the top, he stops to stare at the sunset. The forrest stretches out as far as he can see. He looks at the sun setting and wonder where it sinks to. As he tries to finish climbing, the his grip slips and he falls to the ground.

Luckily his father had heard the cries of the other children and had come, and catches him safely in his arms. His father scolds him for climbing up so high and takes him home. The son tells his father that he justed wanted to do something different. He was tired of always climbing the same tree, just like he was tired of the whole village, which always the same. All he wanted was a chance to see a little farther, but all he saw were trees. His father smiles kindly. The next morning he takes him up to the tallest hill in the village, holds him up on his shoulders and askes him what he sees. He says all sees are trees. Then his father tells him to look further. That's when Abec notices there was something more, a blue outline beyond the forrest. His father told him that it was water, and that the river that flowed through the village ran out to there.

That's when Abec notices the sun was rising in a different place than from where it set. He asks his father where the sun disappears to when it sets. The father tells him truthfully that nobody know that, but according to what he learned as a child, the sizzled away into nothingness as it falls towards the Earth, but it leaves behind its children, the moon and the stars. And when the time comes the moon and stars join together down on the Earth to make a new sun, and the same thing happened everyday. Abec scaughs at this notion, he says that if the sun rises and sets at different places, it probably never stops moving, but rather it's probably lighting up another world underneath theirs. His father laughs, but Abec tells him that some day he'll leave Puniz, and he'll keep walking forever until he reaches the place where the sun sets and he'll see the whole world. His father tells him that there's no reason to want to leave Poniz, and that he'd miss his son. Than he shows him a tree growing in front of his house, and tells him that that tree was planted the same day Abec was born, and that his father hoped that his son could always have that tree to remind him of his father.

Abec's father was a wood-cutter, not a very common profession since most of the village never left much farther than the border of the town. His mother had died giving birth to him. He would often tell a similar story as that as the sun, explaining that the world sometime's had to take the life of one very wonderful person to allow an even more wonderful person to come to life. Abec was always a curious boy, all his life he searched every corner of the village, but by now he knew everything there was to know, and he also knew the dull clockwork to the people's lives. His father felt bad for him, so on the day of his eighth birthday he decided to take him along while he went out and to fetch lumber.

to be continued...

BoosterBronze
11-01-2005, 10:28 AM
I'd love to give an opinion, but I'm not sure there's enoug said to form a fair opinion about anything.

Super Hero Guy
11-01-2005, 04:52 PM
Abec's dreams of travelling beyond the village had always made him something of an outcast amongst the other children, so he had always pretended like he could talk to birds. He would look up at the sky for hours, whispering his thoughts to anything he saw flying by.

He was so happy to be invited into the woods with his father. He had fantasized so often about what it must look like that actually going inside it was both wonderful but slightly disappointing. It was beautiful, but it wasn't nearly as exciting as he had hoped. As they travelled, they sang this childrens song, "Now he head into wood, to do that work that we men should. But though we now face the unknown, and dangers we hope to return home. Cause all journeys must come to end, and when thet do they should at home with your friends."

His father chopped wood while he stayed close by, "making friends" with a robin. Quite suddenly, a sound came from the forrest. It was the sound of a twig snapping. Abec didn't even notice it. But his father leapt in horror at the sound, and grabbed his axe. This is when Abec noticed they were surrounded at all sides by men.

These were strange men, they didn't wear the same clothes as the people of Poniz did. Their skin was a colour he'd never seen, and some of them had hair and eye colours he didn't know people could have. Each of them was armed with a dagger. They had managed to completely surround them without either of them even noticing, if he hadn't been for the one who had stepped on a misplaced twig.

"Run!" screamed his father. But Abec didn't. The men were closing in on his father. He felt his heart beat race, he was shaking all over. And he couldn't move. His father lifted up his axe and cut of the arm of one of them. He swung again, disembowling another. "Run away, now Abec!" his father screamed again. Abec was crying. His father tried to run towards his son, but two men grabbed a hold of him. He struggled against them, but the remaining six men raised up there daggers, stabbing Zyxu Hygufodi repeatedly.

Abec yelled in horror. He turned around and started running away. He could hear the strange men running behind him. He didn't know where he was anymore. There were no roads. All the trees looked the same to him. Which way was the village! He crawled into a bush, ripping his clothes and cutting his skin, and hoped that he wouldn't be found. He stayed there almost an hour, unsure of what to do. Finally, he decided that the men had left. It was getting late now. He knew there were wild animals in the forrest, he could hear them howling from his bed at night. He had no idea where he was.

He wondered aimlessly, as the sunlight weakened. Finally, he found the place where it had happened. His father's bloody body was lying, motionlessly on the ground, covered in ants and flies. Abec kneeled by it, trying to wake him up, but after looking at it long enough he threw-up. Suddenly, he felt an arm on his shoulder.

He looked up, and behind him there was a young woman, maybe sixteen. She had short brown hair and a pretty little bow, and a colorful dress. Her eyes were red with sadness, but she smiled serenly at him. "Who are you?" asked Abec. "I'm here to help you." "How?" "I'm going to take care of you from now on."

To be continued...

Venoman
11-03-2005, 02:58 PM
Hhmmm im not a big fan of fantasy myself... but it sounds good so far. I personaly wouldnt ever pick up a comic set in a forest. I myself have some ideas for a comic but i have no idea what to do about it. What shall i do? Write it out?