Script Scrap! Sequential Script Challenge [Archive]

sparta28090

07-09-2009, 10:19 PM

Page one

Panel 1 : Screen shot of tall woman with thigh high white boots. Her legs are in a wide stance hands on her hips. The screen capture is behind her waist down and between her legs where we see a dirty wizard sitting with his specticles down on the edge of his nose. he has a long flowing white beard which is dirty, he is looking up at her as he is leaned against the wall, we need to see a bottle of booze between his legs (if you have seen Disney's Sword and the Stone's Merlin that is exactly what I am looking for)

Panel 2: Side camera shot of him still in the alley and all we see is her silohette against a night-time sky
Woman: Merle, C'mon honey, get up, it's your dime.
Merle: You look familar

Panel 3: Panoramic Head shot of her leaned back with laughter, she has a jeri-curl perm and she is medium dark-skinned.
Woman: You should we've been partying all week!

Panel 4: Close up of his dirty face with the look of a deer in headlights look
Merle: No....it's not here, but there!

Panel 5: An over the shoulder view of a front shot of a store front that has to convey it's a comic book store, and in some dirty hands is a comic book (whatever you can do to convey it's a Foxxy Voodo comic book)

Page 2

Panel 1: Somewhat same shot of Page 1 Panel 4 but he is grinning michievously now
Merle: I want that! *)(*INCANTATION*)(* Whatever those pages describe I command it to be alive!

Panel 2: Full Body Shot of a black woman in a superhero stance closed fistlike hands on the side of her hips. She has a reddish black afro, white thigh-high roller skates(Thanks to CBrown...think of his creation from the thigh-high boot challenge at Deanlegion's fashion model thread) She is wearing a Power-Woman like costume and shades. There is a glowing auroa around her since she just appeared via magic. Merle is flat on his back wand in his hand reaching toward her like it was a shield and he is surprised as S#!T
Foxxy: It's cool, it's cool, I am Foxxxy Voodo!

Panel 3: Far shot of the alley where the 2 are silohetted in the alley. The alley is narrow and divides 2 tall buildings and a bolt of lighting has struck between them
Sound FX: Kracacacacer Booooommmm!

Panel 4: A muscular figure is descending into the alley from the sky he is over the roof-tops of said buildings his cape's sides are held in each hand (almost like a parachute) as he is lowering. The angle shot should be like the camera is above his left shoulder as he is looking down, distantly we see Foxxy looking up and Merle still on the ground. This is our villian Confederate Chaos His costume (think of Vindicator's costume from Alpha Flight or Captain Brittian from The Ultimates....but with Confererate colors and add a cape)

Page 3

Ok, are you ready for this?.....Think of a Rob Liefield splash page! yay! Both face to face with severe anger, gritted teeth, respective fists held back for the big kapow. The camera shot has Merle standing between them but at a distance.
Foxxy: You are goin to get the Fever-Fist and I ain't Jiving!
Merle: I need a drink
Confederate Chaos: Today, I make the Grand Master proud!

sparta28090

07-13-2009, 09:58 AM

60 hours left. Are aspiring writers alittle shy or enjoying bumping close to deadlines?

Joe Acro

07-13-2009, 04:30 PM

I was going to participate, but an unexpected turn of events sent me out of town for a few days.

Sorry.

sparta28090

07-13-2009, 06:56 PM

Indigo Al

07-13-2009, 07:06 PM

Count me in!

But, I'm going to have to choose between #1 and #5. Stay tuned.

sparta28090

07-13-2009, 07:21 PM

Good to see you again too Indigo Al. I am looking forward to your submission.

You know I was thinking if we got enough submissions and if the artists were into it, the artists could vote on the one they would want to illustrate a cover for.

So get those scripts in guys!

Artist would you be intrested in voting for a fave and then do a cover for a friendly challenge?....I await your input on this, here on the thread or PM me.

Joe Acro

07-13-2009, 07:36 PM

Joe, good to see you again my friend. If people are just hugging the dealines and post some things, I would be open to doing this again.

For the record though, how much time would you need to post something?
Don't postpone the deadline on my account. I'll churn something out eventually, whether it's within the time frame or not.

sparta28090

07-13-2009, 07:42 PM

Fair enough Joe

Bouncing Boy

07-13-2009, 10:43 PM

I'm going to try to take a crack at scenario #5

sparta28090

07-13-2009, 11:29 PM

Looking forward to it Bouncing!

Your Imaginary Pal

07-14-2009, 08:17 AM

sparta28090

07-14-2009, 08:34 AM

Cool IPal! Having you and maybe other artist involved wuld be an awesome add to the challenge....I hope to hear from others on this as well.

LewMoxinsghost

07-14-2009, 08:56 AM

This sounds fun, but I'm covered up and can't do it. I would've picked number 1- look forward to seeing this thread develop.

sparta28090

07-14-2009, 09:44 AM

Lew you keep so many irons in the fire you should be IRON MAN!

rubthemtogether

07-15-2009, 02:30 AM

Hi. I've been lurking on here recently looking for a thread like this. Don't know how I missed this one. I might be able to throw something together tonight for scenario #4, if that's cool?

LewMoxinsghost

07-15-2009, 06:34 AM

Lew you keep so many irons in the fire you should be IRON MAN!

Nah, Iron Man is better funded. :wink:

Kamanu

07-15-2009, 06:44 AM

Sorry Sparta, some things came up in RL so I won't be able to post my script on time. I may even be late with my Supermodel challenge pic.

sparta28090

07-15-2009, 09:21 AM

Hey Kamanu things happen. I may try something like this again, but it will be based on the entries. One has been posted so far....so that leads me to "rubthemtogether".

I hope you are able to post something my friend. This could be a fun thread but only if people participate.

So a friendly reminder...the deadline is tonight (Wednesday) @ midnight

rubthemtogether

07-15-2009, 05:15 PM

I'm making excuses already. About to post my script. It's very rushed, it's my first ever attempt at writing a comics, it doesn't take advantage of the medium really. But hey, it's going up, any feedback will be appreciated, thanks

rubthemtogether

07-15-2009, 05:15 PM

Page 1 (6 panels)

Panel 1
A man dressed in a suit gets out a car. This is STEVE. He carries a document holder. There is a house with a garden in the background.

Panel 2
Over Steve's shoulder, we see the front of the house. It is numbered #7. We see a scrap of paper in his hand with the address '7 Phineas Gardens'.

Panel 3
A living room. Steve leans forward on a two seater couch. Paper sheets sit on the floor under his legs, and some sit on his knee. On a single-seater facing him, JOHN sits lazily back in his chair, hands behind his head, with his own paper in his lap. His face is devoid of expression.

STEVE: AND SO, MR SMITH, IF YOU TAKE US UP ON THIS OFFER, I'M SURE YOU'LL FIND OUR SERVICE SECOND TO NONE

Panel 4
John hands Steve the paper from his lap

Panel 5
Steve stares at John

STEVE: IS THIS...

Panel 6
Same shot

STEVE: IS THIS SOME KIND OF A JOKE?

Page 2 (6 panels)

Panel 1
Over Steve's shoulder, we see a contract. John has scrawled 'I KNOW WHO YOU ARE AND I KNOW WHAT YOU DID' on it.

STEVE: I'VE NO IDEA WHAT THIS MEANS

JOHN: KEEP READING

Panel 2
Steve turns the page. Attached to the page is a crime scene photo. MELANIE'S body lies, bloodied, barely clothed. It's outlined with chalk and surrounded by police tape.

STEVE: OH MY GOD

Panel 3
Steve drops the papers as a gun nozzle appears at his head

JOHN: DON'T BRING GOD INTO THIS. GOD WON'T SAVE YOU.

Panel 4
John brings the gun down on Steve's head, sending him crashing to the ground

Panel 5
A full page-width, completely black panel

Page 3 (6 panels)

Panel 1
Over Steve's shoulder. The only light is John switching on the interior light of the car. John smiles. Steve is tied up on the backseat.

JOHN: HELLO STEVE. OH, DON'T BOTHER TRYING TO REPLY. I'VE REMOVED YOUR TONGUE.

JOHN: DON'T BOTHER TRYING TO MOVE EITHER. YOU'RE SO FULL OF DRUGS I'M AMAZED YOU CAN EVEN BREATHE

Panel 2
Same shot. John points towards the windscreen

JOHN: OK STEVE, SO WHEN YOUR EYESIGHT STARTS TO CLEAR, I'M SURE YOU'LL RECOGNISE THIS PLACE.

JOHN: WHY YES, THAT IS YOUR HOUSE OVER THERE

Panel 3
Same shot. John continues to point.

JOHN: AND, OH ,WHO'S THAT THERE? WHY YES, STEVE, THAT IS YOUR DAUGHTER. DOESN'T SHE LOOK LOVELY IN THAT DRESS

LIKE MELANIE DID

Panel 4
Same shot

JOHN: YOU REMEMBER HOW SHE LOOKED THAT NIGHT, DONT' YOU STEVE? HOW SHE LOOKED, BEFORE YOU MURDERED HER. WELL IF YOU CAN'T REMEMBER NOW, YOU SOON WILL.

Panel 5
Same shot. This time John is moving in the front seat. He opens the door and climbs out. He reaches back in to the interior light.

JOHN: BECAUSE I'M GOING TO RECREATE THE SCENE FOR YOU. I'VE GOT THE PERFECT STAND IN FOR MELANIE TOO. RIGHT OVER THERE IN YOUR GARDEN.

PANEL 6
All black panel

JOHN: GOODBYE STEVE

sparta28090

07-15-2009, 06:12 PM

Very good submission my friend....very eerie from beginning to end!

Indigo Al

07-16-2009, 12:34 PM

Damn - I COMPLETELY missed the deadline. Sorry about that. I could still post something - I understand if its out of the running though.

sparta28090

07-16-2009, 12:49 PM

Go ahead and post it Al. I believe Joe mentioned he would as well. So, you = 3 scripts you and Joe = 4 scripts.

So, if you guys were to post something soon, then I would start a voting thread, to be voted on by artists only (honor system). The artists would would vote on a script inwhich they would like to illustrate a cover for the script. A talented artist Your Imaginary Pal has already expressed intrest in doing something...so get something up guys, if not then I may try another challenge in the future.

Your Imaginary Pal

07-16-2009, 01:41 PM

rubthemtogether

07-16-2009, 02:57 PM

Very good submission my friend....very eerie from beginning to end!

Thanks man, appreciate. I was digging yours too

crazyredlady

07-16-2009, 06:45 PM

I figure it's way too late by now but are you going to do this again?

king white

07-17-2009, 01:34 PM

Your Imaginary Pal

07-17-2009, 03:52 PM

sparta28090

07-18-2009, 10:37 AM

You know what, aside from a sketch for my favorite submission, I think I'll try to even write one for plot 1.

I want to get into writing more, and this is a great opp.

But you won't see it any time soon, maybe Mon/Tue. (A week late)

Also, can we offer up plots for the next challenge, just to shake things up.

You got it!
Script Scrap Challenge 2

1) A powerful villian has just saw on the news one of the least powered superheroes in Quantum City has saved his daughter's life and it conflicts his world.
2) Merlin has unknowingly conjured Howard Houdini to the time of King Arthur
3) A terrorist country, unable to build nuclear bombs, instead, turn to genetic experiments, their 2 first subjects are their most hated American POW and their champion soldier
4) A Mummy, Vampire, and Werewolf walk in a bar....
5) Your plot described in a single sentence(due by Monday at noon) then follow the rules below

The only rules are,
1) Scripts are due by Wednesday at Midnight (est)
2) 3 pages of sequential script
3) Title the book

rubthemtogether

07-19-2009, 01:48 PM

You got it!
Script Scrap Challenge 2

1) A powerful villian has just saw on the news one of the least powered superheroes in Quantum City has saved his daughter's life and it conflicts his world.
2) Merlin has unknowingly conjured Howard Houdini to the time of King Arthur
3) A terrorist country, unable to build nuclear bombs, instead, turn to genetic experiments, their 2 first subjects are their most hated American POW and their champion soldier
4) A Mummy, Vampire, and Werewolf walk in a bar....
5) Your plot described in a single sentence(due by Monday at noon) then follow the rules below

The only rules are,
1) Scripts are due by Wednesday at Midnight (est)
2) 3 pages of sequential script
3) Title the book

Yayyy, another already. I'm up for doing one for 4) A Mummy, Vampire, and Werewolf walk in a bar....

Synopsis - There's trouble when members of three rival supernatural gangs all end up in a bar at the same time

sparta28090

07-19-2009, 02:20 PM

Good selection RT! When I make up the plots they just roll out of my head, so I have yet to make a choice on what I am going to do.

Hooray!-My Imaginary Pal is not only going to do a sketch but he is also intrested in doing a script as well. ....so, I am hoping that we get more scripts this round.

Joe Acro

07-19-2009, 07:56 PM

Patient Zero

Page 1

First few panels. Doctors/nurses hovering over a patient. Should be drawn from the patient's perspective. Leave image intentionally blurry (like blurred vision).

Narration: I can hear them talking. But I cannot concentrate on their words.

Dialogue between medical personnel.

"Do you think he'll need a blood transfusion?"

"I... I don't know. I've never seen anything like this."

"He's going into shock!"

Page 2

Full page panel. Shift perspective to third-person shot. The patient is a short-haired, dark-haired male. He has thrust himself upward on the operation table, screaming in pain, looking like a human caught in primal rage. It should be clear that he is a vampire.

Narration: The pain. It hurts too much.

Page 3

Flashback sequence. Atlanta, 1982.

First few panels: A man sneaking out of the Centers for Disease Control and Prevention. The building does not have to be detailed (though it can be if you want to find out what the CDC looking like in 1982). Just include in the final of this series of panels a shot of the panicked escapee and a vague background with a CDC sign.

Narration for first panel: How did it come to this...

Next set of panels: Escapee is fleeing down a street. He enters an alleyway. The vampire attacks him. The final panel should have the man lying on the ground unconscious after being bitten, without the vampire in the panel.

Caption box for first panel: Later.

Narration for final panel: It started with that guy.

(This is an entry based on #3.)

rubthemtogether

07-20-2009, 02:28 AM

Joe Acro - loved your script. I forgot what the topic was, so the ending was even more of a pay-off. Really good work

Kamanu

07-20-2009, 09:44 AM

I picked #1. This time I'm getting this thing done.

Synopsis: The life of Swindle, the lamest hero in Quantum City, is changed becuase of a life he saved completly on accident.

sparta28090

07-20-2009, 12:30 PM

Page 1

Panel 1 Overhead-panormic shot of a military installation peppered with tents, trucks, and tanks

Caption: Somewhere, Sometime ago...

Panel 2 Blonde buzz-cutt soldier in his boxers sitting on the floor with paper and pencil in his hands.

Caption: (the letter he is writting) My Dearest Amy, My life is no longer in my hands, it's not even in the hands of the doctors and scientist that are outside my door. The only time I loved life is when we were together and now I know I am going to die or wish that I was...

Panel 3 Shot of doctors and staff working in heavy technological suits, only a presense of an IV indicate they have a patient on the table

Caption (continues) My captors have laughed and spit in my face that I was a success, and that now, they will soon have the means to destroy any and all infidels. I have no idea how long I have been here or what the devils have done...

Panel 4 Small panel: Headshot: The soldier has a look of utter surprise

Panel 5 Small panel: pencil drops to the floor

Page 2

Panel 1 Small panel: Soldier lying in fetal position

Panel 2 Small head shot with tool in a doctors hand
Doctor: Almost

Panel 3 Huge Panel: The Medical Team turn to see a huge blast that takes off a wall where their first experiment was kept and in the middle of the blast is the soldier/patient/prisoner

Panels 4-5-6 Just various panels of the prisoner/soldier is literally kicking ass and destroying equipment. The last panel of this mayhem needs to show a hand risen from the bed and the newest patient has only two words to say
Patient (weakly) No, Please

Page 3

Caption: Today
Panel 1 The soldier and an attractive lady (Amy) Standing on the sidewalk of a busy street face to face (try to convey NY...for they are at The UN)

Amy: I know how important today is for you Reb, I will watch from the control room, I will be looking for the sign you have been teasing me about

Panel 2 Small Panel:Amy is walking away from Reb and we see a grin on his face

Panel 3 Small Panel: In his hand is an open ring box with a diamond ring

Panel 4 Huge beam hitting the steps of the UN from above causing explosion and the death of anyone within 300 feet of the blast.

Panel 5 Reb flat on his back while a huge figure has him, lifting him by the front of his shirt with one armored glove hand. (This is our villian gang....think of armored soldier with mask/helmet in other hand....his exposed face is butt-ugly Think F'ed up Spidey clone, hairless of course)

Villian: I was built to be the perfect soldier, does this face you caused look perfect?!

rubthemtogether

07-20-2009, 02:59 PM

Page 1 (9 panels)

I see this page a 3 rows of 3 panels, all similar in size. Rows 2 and 3 should follow the format of row 1. So panels 1,4,7 should all look similar. As should 2,5,8 and 3,6,9. If that makes sense

Panel 1
A pub entrance. An old-fashioned sign swings on the wall, stating the name of the pub as 'The Inkwell'.
We see the back of a man as he enters. The man is dark haired, dressed in black trousers and a black leather jacket. The jacket has 'T-Vamps' written on the back. Ingeniously, we'll call him Vamp.

Panel 2
We look from behind the bar to now see Vamp from the front. Pale complexion, reddish eyes, big old sharp teeth. Your average vampire.

Panel 3
We see Vamp from the side as we look along the bar. He now sits on the bar stool. He looks at the barman.

VAMP - I vant...I vant...to suck your blood

VAMP - Failing that, a pint of bitter

Panel 4
This time an extremely hairy figure stands in the pub doorway. He wears only a leather jacket. The jacket is emblazoned with 'West End Lycans'. We'll call this one Wolf.

Panel 5
We see Wolf from the front. He's trying to comb his hair into a side-parting. He's mostly failing, as he's so hairy the comb barely makes a difference.

Panel 6
We can just see Vamp in the foreground. Maybe just an arm. Wolf stands at the bar, looking straight forward.

WOLF - Pint of lager big man

Panel 7
A figure covered in bandages now darkens the pub entrance. Some of the bandages are loose and trail behind him. Funnily enough, he also wears a leather jacket. His reads 'Cairo Massive'. We'll call him Mummy. He is accompanied by a woman. Big hair, fur coat, high heels.

Panel 8
The woman slides into a booth. Mummy remains standing.

Panel 9
We see along the full length of the bar. Mummy in the foreground, Vamp around the middle, Wolf in the background. Vamp stares at his glass, which is about three-quarters full. Wolf watches Mummy as he takes a mighty swig from his glass, some spilling down his face.

MUMMY- A vodka and coke and a Babycham, ta

Page 2 (7 panels)

For this page I imagine: a row of 3 panels. Panel 4 in the middle of the page, full-width, maybe with full bleed. Then another 3 panels.

Panel 1
Mummy leans over to put the drinks on his table. Over his back we see Wolf shout to him

WOLF - Listen,you know you walking toilet-rolls aren't allowed in here right?

Panel 2
We now look over Wolf's shoulder. Mummy walks angrily towards him, the loose bandages around his feet billowing.

MUMMY - Well, neither are talking rugs. You gonna make me leave?

Panel 3
Two-shot of Mummy and Wolf in each other's faces scowling.

WOLF - Keep up your cheek and those bandages will come in handy

MUMMY - Do something

VAMP (from off-panel) - Perhaps both of you should leave

Panel 4
A fairly big, page wide panel. Vamp stands up and looms menacingly over the other two

Panel 5
A close-up of Mummy's face, his eyes narrowed angrily

Panel 6
Similar shot as panel 5. This time its Wolf scowling, baring his teeth.

Panel 7
Similar shot again. Vamp scowling, making his sharp teeth all the more prominent

Page 3 (9 panels)

Panel 1
Over the barman's shoulder we see the three characters in a close circle

BARMAN – Wait, this isn't right. You're not supposed to fight each other

WOLF – Shut up old man

Panel 2
We see from the group now, they all look back at the barman

BARMAN – Go back to your seats, please

VAMP – He's right, this isn't the place

Panel 3
Wolf and Vamp stand together. We see Mummy return to his table. His girlfriend is still standing from watching the altercation. Wolf notices her coat

WOLF – Is that...real fur?

Panel 4
Jack Kirby-esque action shot. Wolf throws himself at Mummy's girlfriend. Mummy intercepts him in mid-air.

Panel 5
Over the barman's shoulder now. Vamp rushes to break the fight up. Mummy restrains Wolf. His girlfriend is pressed up against the wall terrified.

BARMAN – No, no, no, this isn't the way this is supposed to turn out

Panel 6
Mummy is crushed by a giant finger. We see part of another finger just at the side of the panel

Panel 7
A sheet of paper. We see the previous panel, but it is sketched on the paper as part of a comic strip. The giant finger was from a hand that is scrunching the paper up. We can also see a small bit of panel 5 on the left-hand side, and some of a pen on the right

VOICE FROM OFF PANEL – No, no, no. I knew this wouldn't work. Timeime for lunch, then back to the drawing board

Panel 8
A piece of paper, now balled up, is thrown into a mesh waste-paper basket, where it lands on top of many other pieces

Your Imaginary Pal

07-20-2009, 04:50 PM

1) A planet of Humanoid women has banished 3 women from their planet, and their ship

Heavenly Bodies

Page One

Panel One – (long Horizontal on top of page)
Exterior Shot of Palace – Somewhat futuristic but also Classically Elegant. With Mountain in the Distance.

Unseen Speaker
It’s true, the Queen was found with the Founder’s Stone. Broken.
The most Sacred object in our world.

Panel Two – First of two equal sized panels
Close Up of Angry black haired woman dressed in regal garb in a tribunal setting.

Woman Accuser (Princess Marcia)
And For this crime against our heritage, she and her cohorts must be banished from our world…FOREVER!!!

Panel Three – Second of two Equal Sized panels
Queen Eden and her Trusted Guard Lucy and Advisor Merrill are chained together with shackles binding them together at the neck and their hands shackled.

Queen Eden (furious)
This is a lie. I would never destroy the trust of my people, of my world.

Merrill (whispering to Eden)
Queen Eden, you know this trail is only formality. Your Sister only seeks to shame and humiliate you. Bear your fate in silence, she can take the crown don’t let her take your dignity.

Panel Four
A shot of the cavernous Core of the planet, a river of Magma violently bubbling.

Caption
Meanwhile below the Surface of Thilikosis

Panel Five
Interior of Room where Tribunal is taking Place, shaking with noticeable Cracking. Rocks and dust crumble and fall within the palace. With Princess Marcia in mid range shot howling commands.

Princess Marcia
Our Planet Thilikosis is not pleased. We must Sacrifice my sister and the rest of the betrayers to Mount. Estres.

Page TWO

Panel One
The Three Accused Women are in a Bubble Cage Atop Mount Estres. Marcia and a few Guards are there too across from the accused.

Princess Marcia
Now As the new Queen of all of Thilikosis My first act is to see how the Spirit of Mount Estres Judges you in a true Trail by Fire. If your Bubble Cage dissolves the Spirit will be settled by consuming the souls of the guilty.

Panel Two
Shows the mechanism holding the Cage aloft detach.

Panel Three
Shows the Bubble Cage Descending into the heart of Mount Estres, with the three accused women in silhouette.

Panel Four
A Close Up of The guard Holding Queen Eden as to protect her from the impact, while Merrill is casting a spell eyes rolled into the back of her head trance like.

Panel Five
Marcia looking on as the Bubble Cage descends, her face partially aglow with a sinister sneering smile.
Thought balloon for Marcia
All as I planned. I have the throne and my sister out of the way forever. To rule what is rightfully mine. My plans are finally bearing fruit. When I killed my mother I was sure I was next in line, now no one stands in my way.

Panel Six
An eruption sends the cage Bubble back out the volcano. In a stream of molten rock and flame.

Page Three

Panel One – Small Panel First of Three
Far shot of Mountain with stream of fire flowing up with the bubble cage on top, all in silhouette.

Panel Two
Merrill eyes rolled back and glowing with the queen passed out and her guard holding her up by the shoulder.

Panel Three
Same shot but with Merrill’s eyes back to normal.

Lucy
What just happened Merrill?

Merrill
With any luck, a tiny miracle.

Panel Four – Long Horizontal panel, narrow.
The Bubble Hurtling through space.

Panel Five – First of three evenly spaces small square panels.
The Bubble lands in a body of water creating a massive Splash.

Panel six
The Bubble Deteriorates under water.

Panel Seven
The Accused Swimming around to find shore.

Panel Eight
The Accused with their heads and shoulder just above water looking out at Coney Island. It should be the back of their heads with them looking out at the shore line that has a huge ferriss wheel and some roller coasters shadowed by the moonlight.

sparta28090

07-21-2009, 11:06 AM

Everyone is posting some ass-kicking scripts!... I need some input from you writers and of course artist from this idea.

Post all of the scripts into a seperate thread. Create a poll where artist would be the only ones encouraged to vote (honor system). The artists would vote for their favorite 3 page script that they would like to do a cover for. Then after that we all would then vote for our favorite rendition of the cover. (If this happens maybe our good 'ole beer guzzling moderator "The Mattster" could take over and make a sticky out of it)

So give some input if this would be fun or a waste of time. Since this can't happen without the artist then please speak up here or PM me. Your Imaginary Pal has already indicated his desire to do this and he even posted a script as well...so let me/us know.

Joe Acro

07-21-2009, 02:46 PM

sparta28090

07-21-2009, 03:47 PM

I think, since it's only a three page script, it may not need a cover.

But it would be nice if multiple artists would provide input or offer to draw the scripts.

Totally agree Joe. But, here is why I am suggesting cover art. I am sure you will remember that good 'ole Ninja Mattster use to post a challenge like this and once the voting ended then sequental art would be submitted for all 3 pages and that was voted on and the winner would choose the next topic for a 3 page sequential script, so forth and so on (Thanks Viktor and Lew for being such work horses on those challenges). Well, back to point. Submissions were becomming less and less and final Matt numchucked the challenge (understandablly so). So, I am hoping that a single cover rendition may get more artist involved since time may/could be a factor....and maybe if the artist were down with it we could baby-step it up to more pages.

Just a note: If an artist wanted to do all 3 pages...I say go for it, it would be fun. Also, Joe, take your script for example. If an artist wanted to pencil a cover and another ink it and then another color it, and if someone else wanted to letter it....I am sure any combination of collaboration would be cool....this is just a way for writers and artist to come together. I am sure all agree that artist contribute way more to these threads than writers. I have always been puzzled by this, because their craft requires much more than a writer.

I know, I can't speak for every writer but if any artist likes the 3 pages so far, communicate it, who knows this could be a collaboration....and as always I am open to plot challenge ideas from anyone. I have kept the plots generic and not mainstream, but if writers and artists want that, I think I will sneak one in on Thursday's challenge

Joe Acro

07-21-2009, 05:03 PM

Submissions were becomming less and less and final Matt numchucked the challenge (understandablly so). So, I am hoping that a single cover rendition may get more artist involved since time may/could be a factor....and maybe if the artist were down with it we could baby-step it up to more pages.
Perhaps they could draw only one of the scripted pages?

sparta28090

07-21-2009, 06:35 PM

Perhaps they could draw only one of the scripted pages?

I would be cool with that. I think if enough support could be garnered....maybe the artist could pick and choose. A cover and/or a single page or all of the 3 pages....just leave the power of choice in their hands.

rubthemtogether

07-22-2009, 02:52 AM

I'd be well impressed if anyone took the time to draw up one of my scripts.

sparta28090

07-22-2009, 08:59 AM

Me too RT. I am going to post all of the scripts in a voting thread after midnite and see if there are any intrest from artist.

Free-Man

07-22-2009, 05:19 PM

Me too RT. I am going to post all of the scripts in a voting thread after midnite and see if there are any intrest from artist.

Aw crap, I just found this!!Is the contest over?

sparta28090

07-22-2009, 09:37 PM

Aw crap, I just found this!!Is the contest over?

Tonight at midnight....but post something anyway, I will post a new challenge but after enough new scripts are collected from new and old challenges then I will post them at the next voting poll.

Free-Man

07-23-2009, 09:16 AM

Tonight at midnight....but post something anyway, I will post a new challenge but after enough new scripts are collected from new and old challenges then I will post them at the next voting poll.

Cool. I'll see if I can't whip up something.

Free-Man

07-23-2009, 10:46 AM

Page 1 (6 panels)

Panel 1: A high-tech looking starship cruises through space, past the moon.

Caption: Space. The Milky Way Galaxy.
Caption 2: The Artemis. One of the largest and most advanced prison transport
units in the Universe.

Panel 2: We now see inside of the ship, and it looks to be the interior of a high tech prison. The prison architecture is very distinct. It looks to be a mixture of classic Greek and cyberpunk. Two stoic looking female guards stand outside the cells, dressed in armor, that like the architecture, seems to be inspired by high tech sci-fi and ancient Greek warriors. Three more female guards walk past them, two white, and one black.

Caption 1: “I can’t believe this is working. In a million years I never would’ve dreamed such a simple plan could unfold so flawlessly.”

Panel 3: Close up of one of the two guards in front of the cell. She looks at the trio with suspicion.
Guard: You three! Why are you not at your posts? Where are you supposed to be?

Panel 4: Side shot as the The black woman (Anemone) gives the guard a look full of contempt.

Anemone: Calm yourself. We just came from Cell Block Beta. We’ve been relieved of our posts for the night.

Guard: “Beta?” Isn’t that where the political exiles who spoke out against Queen
Antiope are being held?
Anemone: The very same.
Guard. Hmm…well, carry on then.
Caption: “Imbeciles”.

5: Wide shot. The three women walk into what looks to be the ship’s hangar. Dozens of small, SUV-sized spacecrafts litter the hangar. Like the previously mentioned scenery, the hangar has a distinct Greco-Roman feel to it. The girls remove there helmets. Anemone’s companions, Phillipus (the redhead and youngest of the group) and Desdemona (the brunette) look excited.

Phillipus: I can’t believe that worked. I thought we were done back there.

Anemone: Yes, it was a close call, wasn’t it? Now come on…..

6: Medium range shot of a prison cell with the Greek letter Beta on it. Inside sit three women, each one stripped to their undergarments, and bound and gagged with torn bed sheets. They are struggling wildly.
Captive 1: MMMM!!!
Captive 2: GRRRM!!
Captive 3: HRMRMRMPH!!!
Caption: “….we need to move before someone discovers the REAL guards tied up in our cell!”

Free-Man

07-23-2009, 10:47 AM

Page 2 (5 Panels)
1: A screen shot of one of the small ships jetting out of the Artemis, headed toward earth.

2: Inside the ship, Anemone is at the controls. The other two sit behind her.
Phillipus: Ha Ha!! We made it!!!
Anemone: Yes we did! I got to hand it to you girls! Those were some great moves back there.
Anemone: Especially you Desdemona. That choke hold you pulled on that guard? MARVELOUS.

3: The ship enters earth’s atmosphere. We see the ship headed toward a small city surrounded by dense forest.
Caption: “It was nothing dear. But you deserve the real credit Anemone. I never would’ve thought of faking sick to lure the guards into the cell.”

4: The ship sets down in the forest at night.

5: The women step out of the ship, and talk in a huddle.
Desdemona: So about how long do you think we have until someone notices the ship is gone and the guards are tied up?
Anemone: We should have a good two hours before the guards’ shifts are over, so likely no one will discover them until then. As for the ship, it’s late, so I doubt anyone is really paying attention to the hangar.
Phillipus: Great, so now what? Where do we go from here?
Desdemona: Phillipus raises a good point. What’s the plan? How will we be sure we aren’t found out?
Anemone: This planet has over six billion people, and the crew on the ship will never know where we entered this planet’s atmosphere. We were sure to land in a desolate area, so I doubt anyone will find the ship either. As long as we lay low, the Holy Amazonia Empire will NEVER find us.
Phillipus: Hmm….but how will we blend in?
Anemone: There’s a town up ahead.

Insert panel: A shot of the small city.
Caption:”…we’ll be able to find clothes and shelter there”.

Free-Man

07-23-2009, 10:48 AM

Page3 (6 Panels)

Panel 1: A wide shot of a 4 trendy looking and well dressed women walking down the streets of the city. One of the women is pointing.
Woman 1: I told you we shoulda ordered a cab! Now we’re lost!”
Pointing woman: Hold on, let’s head that way! I recognize that place…I think.

2: The women cut through a dank and foreboding looking alleyway.
Woman 1: Uhmm…who’s idea was this again?
Woman 2: Don’t worry, just watch where you step.

3: Screen shot of the three Amazonian escapees, still clad in their prison uniforms, stepping out in front of the women.

4: Close up of Anemone’s face with a devious smile.
Anemone: Hello ladies. Nice outfits. Mind if we borrow them?
Insert panel: The women look terrified:

5: Shot of the exit of the dark alley.
Woman (offscreen): Wait…what are you….AIIEEEE!!!!
FX: Pow!
Woman (offscreen) Aghhh!!
FX: Krak!
FX: KRUUUNCH!
FX: Bang
FX: Rrrrrip

6: Wide shot. The Amazonians, now clad in the women’s clothes, victoriously walk out of the alley. A large dumpster is seen prominently in the background.
Caption: To Be Continued…?

sparta28090

07-26-2009, 12:50 PM

With The Art portion so close to the end, I thought I would keep the script challenge rolling.

I know there is still time for the artist to vote (so, hint-hint) but I must say I am disappointed with only one vote throughout the poll. The script that has that vote is very worthy, but I wonder why there is only one thus far? Any input on how to get the art portion of our challenge more excitable would be appreciated. So as an experiment one of the challenges below will be established characters.

The Challenge! You are to choose one of the topics below and do a 3 page script and Title the Book . Other than the 3 page rule & Titling the book as if it was an on-going title, there are no others. No prizes, No rewards. Crits are encouraged by all.

1) A young boy, now grown, raised by gypsies after witnessing the murder of his parents by a band of outlaws, has just found a silver colt 45 that never needs reloading and seems to never run out of ammo.
2) 4 teens while double dating dare each other to open a casket at a cemetary and misc jewlery is taken from the corpse and suddenly they have weird powers that chanel through the jewelry.
3) Deadpool encounters a half-beaten Bizzaro who claims to have been assulted by a gang of girl-scouts from his Bizzaro-World courtesy of Mr. Myxtylplix (I know, I know, spelling is off)
4) Sherlock Holmes invistigates the case of Jack the Ripper.
5) "Wild Card" Your choice. If chosen please include a single sentence at the beginning of your script that describes the plot.

king white

07-26-2009, 04:22 PM

I think you have got a great thing going here without artists Sparta! Let the writers decide the winner by ranking the scripts with 1st 2nd and 3rd place votes.

LewMoxinsghost

07-26-2009, 06:29 PM

I second that, man. No need to rush the development to visuals! :cool:

sparta28090

07-27-2009, 12:15 AM

I think you have got a great thing going here without artists Sparta! Let the writers decide the winner by ranking the scripts with 1st 2nd and 3rd place votes.

Sounds good to me. I'll just keep the scripts going with various challenges and then after x amount of scripts then I'll construct a poll on the scripts themselves.

King and Lew, what do you guys think about the idea that an artist sketches a character of their own creation, or one that is done and sitting in a drawer, and as 1 of the 5 choices in these challenges gives us writers a shot at doing a 3 page sequential script on it. No, set standards on it, like if you already have a name...put it with your sketch post, this would also include if you have any powers or intresting tidbits you had about the character as you have envisioned it....this is just a new way of keeping the writing challenges fresh and exciting.

sparta28090

07-27-2009, 09:42 AM

I forgot this....Current Challenge ends Friday July 31st @ 11:59PM (EST)

sparta28090

07-28-2009, 04:07 PM

Page One

Panel 1 Panoramic panel. The shot is over the shoulder of the main character so we just get alittle glimpse of his profile. He is looking at a campfire where there arw various things about, such as a wagon, a spare wheel, baskets, adults and children

Caption: It is almost like this

Panel 2 Same shot but the backgrond is diffrent, just a horse and a kettle and 1 man and 1 woman both shot in the head. The profile of the man is that now he is as a child

Caption: But exactly like this...

Panel 3 Same as panel one but blocking most of the fire and the background is an older man looking down on the younger man

Older Man: I have something to show you Jeb.

Panel 4 Shows Jeb and the older man walking away from the village-like campsite into a field.

Page 2

Panel 1 The older man is looking at Jeb as Jeb looks at the lone wagon at a small campsite. It is more rickety than the others.

Older man: Jeb, you know that by our law that I am not allowed to camp with everyone since I am no longer their leader

Panel 2 Same shot but the older man is walking toward his wagon now as Jeb watches on

Old Man: As I promised I have something to show you...

Panel 3 Close up shot of a very used silver Colt 45 in an opened box that is decorated majestically and shiny a complete opposite of the gun.

Old Man: Years ago I made a deal with the devil for a gun that never empties and I used this to defend our people

Panel 4 Same shot as 3 but an old hand is now hovering over it

Old Man: What the devil told me was that he who shoots the gun will always have murder in his heart

Panel 5 We now see Jeb with a look of terror as the old man has the gun pointed at him

Old Man: I killed your parents Jeb, and the way I see it, the only way to have peace is.....

Page 3

Panel 1
Off panel from Old man: is to give this to you

Show gun going from old man to Jeb

Panel 2 Full shot of Jeb holding the gun and now the gun looks clean and it is glowing

Panel 3 3 small panels in this one panel
1) Shot of Jebs right side of the face his eye wide open in surprise
2) Same shot but he looks devlish and grins with teeth showing
3) Old man's face in surprise as a bullet enters between his eyes
Sound Fx Ka-Pow!

Panel 4 We see Kenny's back as he holds the glowing gun he is also aglow and walking toward the crowded campsite.

Caption: Deals with the devil always has a terrifying twist and sometimes worlds must suffer such deals...What else will happen to Jeb? Find out in our brand spanking new book called "THE DEVIL'S GUNN"

LewMoxinsghost

07-28-2009, 04:53 PM

Sounds good to me. I'll just keep the scripts going with various challenges and then after x amount of scripts then I'll construct a poll on the scripts themselves.

King and Lew, what do you guys think about the idea that an artist sketches a character of their own creation, or one that is done and sitting in a drawer, and as 1 of the 5 choices in these challenges gives us writers a shot at doing a 3 page sequential script on it. No, set standards on it, like if you already have a name...put it with your sketch post, this would also include if you have any powers or intresting tidbits you had about the character as you have envisioned it....this is just a new way of keeping the writing challenges fresh and exciting.

I really like this idea Steve and will give it some more thought.

sparta28090

07-28-2009, 05:49 PM

Go for it Lew! You and other artist can post anything at anytime you like and I will convert it into a script challenge

rubthemtogether

07-30-2009, 02:37 PM

Good job Sparta, I liked that.

The one thing I would change, is the revealing dialogue continuing from page 2 to 3. I like the idea of a cliffhanger before the page change, but I think it would be better on one page

rubthemtogether

07-30-2009, 02:46 PM

Page 1 (3 panels)

Panel 1
Page width. The wild west. A desert during the day. A bunch of evil-looking cowboys are destroyed by a hail of bullets, their bodies and faces ripped apart.

CAPTION - I could do this all day

CAPTION - Literally.

Panel 2
Page width. We now see where the bullets came from, as we first see BILLY. He wears standard cowboy clothes, checked shirt, jeans, boots. He has a crop of bright blonde hair, and he looks about 18 years old. His hands are a blur as his right swings his pistol, his left hand held above it.

CAPTION - Cassie here, she can keep this up 'til the cows come home. And then some. No reload. No jams. No misses.

Panel 3
Page width. Billy has now stopped shooting. He holds the gun up to his chest.

CAPTION - Now, that might've seemed harsh, but these fellers here, they definitely had this coming.

Page 2 (5 panels)

Panel 1
Page width. This panel is similar to Page 1, Panel 1. We see the same group of outlaws from the same angle. Only this time, it's them that are firing.

CAPTION - They killed my ma and pa. Thought they'd killed me

Panel 2
Page width. On the left of the panel, a younger Billy, 12 years old, lies face down on the ground. He is flanked by the bodies of his dead parents. Behind him, a wagon lies on the ground, burning. In the middle of the panel, a woman is approaching him. To the right of the panel, a group of men and women look on. An intact wagon behind them.

CAPTION - Well, they kind of did

Panel 3
Heaven. Billy walks through the pearly gates. His clothes are dirty, but not bloodstained. People in white robes walk by talking, oblivious to him. He stares wide-eyed at his surroundings.

CAPTION – I saw heaven

Panel 4
Over the shoulder of a figure on a throne. He is a tall and imposing cowboy. Longish hair, cowboy hat. Okay, it's the Saint of Killers from Preacher. He looks down at Billy, who looks tiny in comparison. Understandably, Billy looks terrified

CAPTION - But I don't think I saw God

Panel 5
Page width. A desert at night A fire burns, surrounded by a large group of people. In the centre lies young Billy. A woman stands beside him, holding a book open with both hands. Behind him, a woman kneels, clutching his head in her hands

CAPTION – Somehow or other, these people brought me back to life

Page 3 (5 panels)

Panel 1
Night in the desert. A weary looking Billy collects wood. Behind him, the beginnings of a campfire burn

CAPTION - When I recovered, I sought revenge. I never found it. In heaven I was told to look to Wolfridge for vengeance. But no such place could be found until...

Panel 2
Aerial shot. Billy stands looking forward. In front of him, the moon illuminates the ridge of a hill. It distinctly resembles the shape of a wolf's head in profile

Panel 3
Top of this hill. We see Billy's legs as he stands on the edge. At his feet lies the Colt 45. It shines brightly, unnaturally so.

CAPTION – I found Wolfridge. I found Cassie. And I found revenge.

Panel 4
We see Billy from the front. At the bottom of the panel we can see that he's now holding the gun. His eyes look off to the side as he becomes aware of people behind him. There stands some other cowboys, pointing their guns at Billy. Some smile menacingly.

Panel 5
Page width panel, filling the rest of the page. Same shot as previous. Only this time Billy smiles.

CAPTION – Well, I may as well start somewhere

sparta28090

08-30-2009, 07:36 AM

New Challenge! You are to choose one of the topics below and do a 3 page script and Title the Book . Other than the 3 page rule & Titling the book as if it was an on-going title, there are no others. No prizes, No rewards. Crits are encouraged by all.

1) A gold medalist in track is kidnapped by a rich, crippled man who seeks to harness the Olmpiad's genes to help him walk again....but the experiment gives the young man the speed of light.
2) A new hero changes his idenity to become a member of a Super-powered villan syndicate to infiltrate and destroy them...but the lines of right and wrong start to blur.
3) Batman hunts the Green Arrow to stop his radical ways. But with a huge public reward offering, the public re-think the Dark Knight as a greedy bounty hunter.
4) Loki "god of michief" trains a viking boy while unknowingly abandoned in a strange land, decades ago...the land we now know as America. The boy, now a man is awaken to bring destruction on a modern America
5) Artist Wild Card! Just supply a sketch whether new or just found in a lone drawer/folder. Let us name the character, let us activate their powers in the 3 Page format(the deadline is waived until a sketch is posted then a script will be a 7 day turnaround once posted...be on the look-out for full disclosure)

Submit scripts by Friday, September the 4th @ midnight

sparta28090

08-31-2009, 07:50 PM

Page 1

Panel 1: Large panromantic panel: Night Time: Rear Silohette of Batman on a rooftop looking at a huge Church that has had a large portion of it blown to smithereens, smoke and fire are being controlled by the Gotham Fire Department

Panel 2 Batman in a crouched position with his chin in his right hand while a set of binocoluars rest in the other hand....(think of the the "Thinking Man's" statue for proper pose

Panel 3 Show a broken green arrow resting at his feet
Caption: Damn Ollie! They will never forgive you...

Panel 4 Show a woman in a distress as she holds her child to her chest
Caption: and they will never forget

Page 2

Panel 1 The interior of a hole in the wall bar in Gotham's worst crime ridden area. 2 patrons at the bar, both street punks, one fat and the other slim, slim is reading a newspaper with various tats and piercings. In the background sits a lone man in an over coat nursing a drink with a bottle resting on a dilapidated table.

Street Punk 1(slim): Looky here Turtle! 2 million bucks dead or alive on that yahoo in green tights!

Street Punk 2: That's alotta beer Carter!

Carter: !@#$ man, that's a couple breweries

Panel 2 Close-up of the lone man. Even though it is dark he is wearing shades and a match rests on lip brushed by his mustache.

Caption: The reward will make things harder to find Ollie now, but my snitches tell me, here is where I will find why Ollie attacked an innocent Church.

Panel 3 Design a masked character with heavy artilley. Your newly designed character has just burst through the entrance of the bar. The patrons are in shock except for the lone man.

Masked man: Which of you scum can tell me where The Green Arrow is? Tell me and you all live!

Panel 4 Your newly designed character has decided to eat cigratte butts found on the dirty floor of the bar as an arrow with a boxing glove has just pummeled the back of his head.

Panel 5 A lone shot of Green Arrow standing at the doorway...his costumed changed to a darker green.

Green Arrow: No need to look you coupon clippers...here I am!...Want some? then come and get some!

Page 3

Panel 1 Small panel of a blue glove tapping the Green Arrow on the shoulder

Panel 2 Small panel of Green arrow (headshot) turning to face who is tapping him

Panel 3 Small panel (same as panel 2) but know a blue gloved fist has popped him in the chops

Panel 4 Batman now has the Green Arrow by the front of his tunic ready to deliver another punch, his teeth are clenched in anger

Batman: Why?...who benifits of what you have done
Green Arrow: (groggily) I don't have to answer to you...but the Church is a front for abortion clinic bombings

Panel 5 Suddenly Batman and Green Arrow are surrounded by a huge mob. Some have bats, some have knives, and the rest with clenched fists.

Speaker of the Mob: Trying to get the reward for yourself Assman? Well, we will make sure you never get the bucks, we deserve it more than you! ATTACK!

sparta28090

09-05-2009, 12:37 PM

New Challenge, New Format

Ultimately Super-Powered

1)Create a New Superhero that is like Superman/Wonder Woman, Supreme, Thor, etc

2) Create a Super Villian counterpart to your new hero, ie Dr. Doom, Darkseid and such

3) Do a synopsis of your new creations

4) Script a 3 page sequential format of a brief origin story of your new creation

The entries then will be posted in a voting poll inwhich EVERYONE can vote. Deadline September 12 Saturday at 9:00 PM(EST)

And as promised this challenge will remain for any artist Artist Wild Card! Just supply a sketch whether new or just found in a lone drawer/folder. Let us name the character, let us activate their powers in the 3 Page format(the deadline is waived until a sketch is posted then a script will be a 7 day turnaround once posted

Good Luck!

sparta28090

09-09-2009, 12:28 PM

AAAAArrrrragggggaaaaahhhhh! I have troubles with this one. I mean I am looking to do something original and I can't get the gist of it. I mean uber-powerful characters seem to be caused by:
1) Alien or something alien
2) Mythological
3) Magical
4) Scienfific

So I am at a loss on originality....but I will keep thinking.

starkoryan81

09-10-2009, 02:56 AM

Here's a guy I came up with for this. If you'd like to work your magic, I'd love to read what you guys come up with...http://i558.photobucket.com/albums/ss27/starkoryan81/RandomGuy.jpg

sparta28090

09-10-2009, 09:46 AM

Here's a guy I came up with for this. If you'd like to work your magic, I'd love to read what you guys come up with...

ARTIST WILD CARD CHALLENGE

Yes! We have our very first artist wildcard challenge! starkoryan has provided us with a very nice orginal sketch....Thank you my friend!

The Challenge: Do a 3 page sequential script of the original character where you do his origin and manifest his power. These are the only rules except for a deadline of Thursday, September 17 at 9:00 PM.

Since we are so lucky to have someone finally post some of their hard work please participate and if there are ENOUGH of entries we will have a poll inwhich everyone can vote on their favorite...so get busy and post something!

Joe Acro

09-10-2009, 06:38 PM

I'll post something this weekend.

sparta28090

09-10-2009, 06:48 PM

Good to see you again Joe and I look forward to what you come up with! There was something else I forgot to mention:

You must also name the Character

GOOD LUCK TO ALL!

sparta28090

09-11-2009, 09:13 PM

Page 1

Panel 1: Panoramic shot of an arceological dig in an ancient Japanese site, where various people and machines are at work. On the left side of the panel is a small panel and all it shows is a man's mouth speaking into a cell phone.

Mysterious Mouth: Have you collected all of the DNA, Dr. Simmons?

On the right side of the panel is a headshot of man (think of a nerdy Indiana Jones) he is sweating profusely and his glasses is in danger of sliding off his nose and he is of course on a cell phone.

Dr. Simmons: It as you wish, sir...HAIL CON!

Panel 2: (in the same format as panel 2) Panoramic shot of a labratory with buttons and dials, and techs working on the chest plate that Ryan has illustrated on his character (think of an armoured T-Shirt). On the left side is a panel of a hand that is pushing a button on an intercom

Mysterious Hand: Is the armour ready, Dr. Hester?

On the right side of the panel is a headshot of a sexy woman in a cool deamoner who is speaking through an ear-piece/mic combo

Dr. Hester: We await the subject...HAIL CON!

Panel 3: (same format as panels 1&2) Panormic of a dilapidated bar. In the center appears to be a young man passed out face down on his table where his last drink has tumbled on it's side on the table. His hoodie is over his head, arms sprawled out but the bottle is loosly in one hand. Left side of the panel is again the mysterious mouth talking into an earpiece/mic combo

Mysterious Mouth: Have you found us a subject, Dax?

On the right side of the panel we see a head shot of a rough and tough ex-millitary man speaking through a transistor watch

Dax: Subject accounted for per your specifics...HAIL CON!

Page 2

Panel 1: Sidewalk Shot looking up of a skyline(any metropolis you feel comfy making or creating). But one building needs to stand apart in design from the others. It is the headquarters of a huge conglomerte called Gan-Con. It's archetechture needs to show it is the pinacle of style and technology.

Caption: Men have meddled in affairs that have caused destruction and great things. Today, they test their theories with ancient DNA, clonning, and a mysterious alloy that has fell on the earth. Today, they think they will be gods while others will see them as demons.

Panel 2: a seated observation room above the lab ran by Dr. Hester. Hester stands in a white lab coat, a skirt that is too short to be on a brilliat scientist, her hair is loped around her head in a frilly bun. She holds a board with various lights and a stylus in the other dainty hand...She adresses the crowd, some dressed as business mongols, others are nerdy.

Dr. Hester: Today, consider yourself in the upper echelon of finance and intelligence, but mostly consider yourself lucky to be our employees so....

Panel 3: Full body shot of the youth that Dax had found at the bar: He is bald, he has huge needles inserted between each rib, knuckle and toes. The chestplate is under him waiting to be closed. he also has a respirator mask on his face.

Dr Hester continues in caption boxes: "You can see the birth of immortality..."

Panel 4 Small headshot of the mask being removed and now a faint mark is appearing under his left eye and the center of his bottom lip.

Caption: "To see what it feels like...."

Panel 5: A little larger panel than 4 as the chest plate is being closed

Panel 6: A tiny panel of the young man's left eye now wide open and what was a faint mark is now a bright red, orange, or magenta (you choose)

Panel 7: Headshot of Dr. Hester she looks manic, hysterical, evil, if you will

Dr Hester: To work for gods!

(Note....it is never my intention to do 7 panels on a single page if it seems too difficult or takes away from the story-telling...let's talk about edits...while I am flexible, this is an important page)

Page 3

Panel 1: Observation room. people are shielding their face with arms, briefcases, and hands as the glass has shattered due to an explosion in the lab

Panel 2: Computer screen that is being held in the hands of Dr. Hester has a graph of the youth's body, we now see the youth in full uniform as Ryan has illustarted and he is hovering over the lab floor in the background as Hester's computer board has the uptmost attention of the panel The screen needs to read

Alien Alloy: Shielding and Gravitational field status.....ACCEPTABLE
DNA: SAMURAI.........ABSORBED
SHOGAN.........ABSORBED
ALERT>>>ANONOMALY>>>UNKNOWN>>>ALERT
Health: ALERT>>>UNCHARTABLE>>>ALERT
Brain Waves: COUNTING>>>COUNTING>>>COUNTING
SYSTEM CRASH>>>SYSTEM CRASH

Panel 3: Full Body shot of the Youth and a Ninja star has telekenatically appeared in his hand.

Youth: Way cool! I have always dreamed of having super powers and I so gotta be called IMPERIAL and, and, I think I need a mask

Panel 4: Small shot of Imperial still floating and the star is disapating as his concentration has dwindled. We see a close-up of a Mongoligan Boot with the head of a battle axe resting beside it....

Mystery Man: Get the boy a mask for this freakish mistake is about to lose his head. Now, this is the part where you say hail to me...HAIL GANGIS CON!

*Oh Boy rambunctious readers what does the future hold for these brand-spanking new characters? Who is Imperial? is he a superhero? a villian? an accident? or will we never know if he does indeed lose his head? Be sure to pick up our new ongoing mag IMPERIAL #1 with artist extrodaire RYAN! and a monkey with a typewriter! Alternate covers by Madureia, Viktor, Tim Sale, Lew, Jim Lee, White, gold embossed cover by Liefield and a triple-gatefold, platium by Ryan Himself! Buy them all next month and go ebay crazy!

MailOrderClone

09-12-2009, 06:53 PM

I'm going to try to come up with something for starkoryan's piece. Here's hoping that I don't deviate too far from what he had in mind.

Page 1
Panel 1
Wide panel. We see a thin, lanky, balding man in his late twenties. He is knelt beside a robot in the shape of a cartoon bear, occupied wrenching an interior bolt into place. A few mechanical bits and pieces are strewn about on the floor, and a red toolbox sits on the ground beside him, open, and with the robot’s covering, mainly brown fur with black and white googley eyes, black ears and a black nose attached to it. In the background, by an opening in some red curtains, the silhouetted form of another man stands.

CAPTION: [Once upon a time, there was a man named Arthur Cartwright. He was an unassuming fellow. Worked hard at the local theme park building and maintaining those little robotic automatons. Not the most glamorous gig in the world, but it was steady work.]

Silhouetted Man: “Hurry it up Cartwright. We need that contraption ready in fifteen minutes.”

Arthur: “Not a problem, sir.”

Panel 2
Another wide panel. This one shows Arthur, along with a pair of other men, all clad in black sweaters and black pants. One holds a crowbar, and the other holds a black duffel bag. They hide beside a building, the first of the men peering around a corner and toward an unguarded brick building seated comfortably in the far background. The two other men are wearing black ski masks, and Arthur, on the right, is pulling his own on.

CAPTION: [Problem was, that steady work didn’t pay quite enough to get by on. So Arthur got himself a job as a criminal. Stealing had some nice overhead and plenty of room for career growth…]

Robber 1: “Simple job. Get in, grab the formula, and get out.”

Panel 3
Smaller panel, showing the man crowded around the door, with one prying into it with a crowbar.

Panel 4
Small action panel of the trio barging into the building, lit only by the light streaming in from outside. It’s difficult to tell who any of these men are. All of the scenes inside of this building are done in stark lights and darks with light coming from a single source.

Panel 5
A larger panel, this one showing a view from the doorway from the floor. We look in at the trio of robbers as they turn around, sighting the new arrival. All we see of him is a bright pair of orange boots and a matching cape. Really, that’s all we need to see of him at this point.

Superhero: “Halt evildoers!”

CAPTION: […so long as you didn’t get yourself caught by one of those costumed crimefighters, anyway.]

Page 2
Panel 1
Square sort-of panel. The superhero’s is not shown entirely, and is in fact missing his head and neck off the top of the panel. He wears bright blue tights with orange trim and has a stylized, circular H on the front of his costume. His gloves and boots and cape are all bright orange. He stands a proud, muscular god-being of a man. Fists high on hips, chest jutted out. The prototypical superhero.

CAPTION: [I remember the tights and the cape, but I don’t remember the face. Could’ve been any number of people.]

Panels 2 through 4
More square panels here. Simple contents too. Each panel shows a gang member, Arthur, the one with the crowbar, and the one with the bag, all being punched and generally brutalized by the superhero. Again, his face is not shown. This is mainly because the narrator doesn’t quire recall what he looked like. Classic Batman-esque sound effects are optional.

Panel 5
With a mighty fling, which could include the actual word FLING in large letters, Arthur is tossed by the superhero toward a solid brick wall. The superhero is viewed from the back, so his cape has washed up to hide his visage once again.

CAPTION: [And, while I admit my memories of that night are a bit lacking, and the exact events are up for debate…]

Panel 6
A pile of bricks, with dust obscuring the background. Only a hand sticks out, with a black sleeve up halfway to the elbow. Arthur probably isn’t feeling all that great at the moment.

Page 3
Panel 1
A shot of a hospital room. Arthur is wrapped almost from head to toe in bandages and casts. His legs are held in bed-mounted slings, as is one arm. The other arm, his left, sits free, and he glares down at it.

CAPTION: […the fact remained that I was left with a broken body.]

Panels 2 through 6
A set of five panels stretching across the page’s width. The first shows a shot of his free, unbroken hand. The second is a pair of metal gears against a black background. The third shows the hand again, balled into a fist. The fourth panel is another with a black background, this time showing a lit welding torch. And finally, the last of this line of panels displays the bandaged face of Arthur Cartwright, staring down at his hand. This final panel is accompanied by a caption at it’s bottom.

CAPTION:

[B]Panel 7
Here we finally see our hero… or rather, our villain. He stands, one arm raised and lasers launching from cannons that have appeared from the circular panels on his shoulders. The panel on his chest, too, has pulled away and revealed a circular container for a barrage of mini-rockets. The hapless police officers that he fires upon are preoccupied with taking cover behind their police cars. Their displeasure with him has likely stemmed from that large bag of money, complete with money sign on the side, of course, which he holds in his unraised hand. The caption boxes sit in the top left and bottom right of this shot, leaving it plenty of room to breathe.

CAPTION: [Arthur Cartwright isn’t around to tell the tale anymore. Every part has been replaced with machinery, made better than before.]

CAPTION: [These days, I tend to go by The Automatic Man more often than not. In many ways, I’m what you’d call a self-made man.]

Joe Acro

09-12-2009, 10:40 PM

Page 1.

Panel 1: Enemies physicality left to artist's discretion) standing on a hillside.

Narration: I can see them coming.

Panel 2: Enemies charge down hill.

Narration: Insects swarming to the dying.

Panel 3: Close-up of hero's clenched fist.

Narration: They've wiped out the other heroes.

Panel 4: Close-up of hero's chest/chest symbol.

Narration: I'm all that's left.

Panel 5: Close-up of hero's other hand, sparking electricity.

Narration: A flick of the wrist, and my power comes on. Just like always.

Page 2:

Panel 1: Close-up of hero's same hand, in similar position (still gloved).

Narration: Always... Ever since that day.

Panel 2: Zoomed out image of the hero standing on an open field, wearing a different costume.

Narration: I was chosen to test a sort of power suit for the military.

Panels (undefined number): Hero showing feats of strength, speed, and durability in suit.

Narration: And test it I did. I didn't stop, even when the rain came.

Panel: Hero struck by lightning.

Narration: Some days, I wish I had.

Panel: Hero crumbled onto ground, smoking.

Narration: The suit was in ruins, but it had protected me. And something... more.

Panel: Close-up of hero's eye.

Narration: I could feel newfound power coursing through me.

Page 3:

Panel 1: Close-up of hero's eye (back to Page 1 scene):

Narration: Since then, I have been something else.

Panel 2: Enemies closing in.

Narration: A deterrent to evil.

Panel 3: Close-up of energized hand.

Narration: A hero.

Panel 4: Large spread of hero charging into battle against swarm of enemies.

Narration: More than just John Ellis. I am...

Powerstrike

Jae Namkyoung

09-12-2009, 11:36 PM

Note: My first script attempt, hehe.

Haesik

Page 1:

Panel 1: Moon above, millet field, stars in the sky, a young man holding a rifle. Upper left hand corner box notation, Korea 1952.

Narration: My name is, Kwon Ji Hyuk, I am only seventeen, but my country tells me to fight, I wish to be home, eating Oma's rice cakes, not cold, and shivering. I don't want to fight, I don't want to fight, I just want to be free.

Panel 2: American soldiers, shouting, guns shooting, Kwon ducks, afraid to fight.
Word Balloon, Korean Soldier #1: Hyuk! Get up you, coward! Shoot them!
Word Balloon, Kwon: No! I do not wish to fight! I do not wish to fight!
Word Balloon, Korean Soldier #2: Leave him! He will die! C'mon keep firing!

Panel 3: Pan to the moon, notice a figure on top, it is a woman, she is praying.

Word Balloon, Dalsun: Save my brother, let him be free, let me save him, he once took my place.
Word Balloon, Stars (a group looking toward her): Your prayers have been heard, daughter. Go now, soon Haesik will be free.

Panel 4 (horizontal below 1-3): Kwon, holds up his hands and runs toward the Americans. Focus on Kwon.

Word Balloon, American Soldier #1: STOP! STOP RIGHT THERE!
Word Balloon, Kwon: I surrender! I surrender! I don't want to fight!
Word Balloon, American Soldier #2: Hey! You @#$!ing Gook! STOP!
Narration: I didn't want to fight, I was drafted into this war. I just want to go home, I was hoping they would understand, but I don't think they can understand Korean. I forgive them, I can see it in their eyes, they too are scared.

Panel 5 (horizontal below 4): Kwon's dropped his gun, he's got his hands in the air still, shouting at them. Focus on the Americans.
Word Balloon, American Soldier #3: What are you two doing? SHOOT HIM!
Word Balloon, American Soldier #4: I think he's trying to surrender, sir.
Word Balloon, American Soldier #2: HEY! YOU! STOP!
Action, American Soldier #3 shoots Kwon, repeatedly.

Panel 6: Focus on Kwon, he's dead, bleeding on the millet. American Soldier #2, kneeling over him.
Word Balloon, American Soldier #2: Jesus #@$!ing Chris, you're a kid, you're just a kid.

Panel 7: American Soldier #2, puts a medal of St. George on Kwon.
Word Balloon, American Soldier #2: I'm sorry it had to be you, kid.

Page 2:

Panel 1: On the moon, Kwon appears, he's unsure of what's going on, Dalsun is smiling.
Narration: I died, and yet I am alive. This cannot be, yet here I stand, on the moon, with a woman in front of me.

Word Balloon, Dalsun: Haesik! Haesik! It is me, your sister, Dalsun!
Word Balloon, Kwon: I am Kwon Ji Hyuk, I am from Kaesong.
Word Balloon, Dalsun: Yes, but you are Haesik, you left us for a mortal life, I've watched over you.

Word Balloon, Kwon: You have? Then. Then, why, why was I drafted? Why did I die?!

Panel 2: Kwon is upset, Dalsun trying to be understanding, the stars are brighter in contrast to previous panels.

Narration: Haesik? That old myth? I cannot be Haesik, for he was the Sun and then later the Moon, because Dalsun was afraid, of the night. This cannot be, I am no God.

Word Balloon, Dalsun: Oh Haesik, I will explain, everything. Come with me.
Word Balloon, Kwon: I- I
Word Balloon, Dalsun: Please, Kwon?
Word Balloon, Kwon: Okay.

Panel 3 (equal to panel 4 & 5 of page 1): Kwon, in his armor, coming down to Seoul, South Korea, with Arirang (in musical notes) flowing around him. (his face his white, the markings are in black, armor is black and white, the circles are red, his sash is blue).

Narration: I took her hand, in mine, and we flew into the stars. There, I learned who I was, and what had happened, and why I left. Though, I was sad, I missed my family, and my friends. I cried, when my country split, and I prayed to the stars, once more if I could leave heaven, so I can bring peace... They granted my prayer.

Panel 4 (equal to 6 & 7): Kwon lands in the middle of Seoul, it is 2009, everyone recognizes him, as Haesik, in armor, some think he is a cosplayer of Animé, and others believe the old Gods have returned. No dialogue, glamor shot of Kwon.

Page 3:

Title Splash: The Sun, the Moon and the Tiger.

Panel 1: A man dressed in light clothing, watches this new Haesik, he has a tiger tattooed on his forearm, that is noticeable to us.
Word Balloon, Man: So, Haesik, you've returned again, you always did love this Earth too much. Soon, I will have my revenge upon you, your flesh will decay for my pleasure.

Mini-Panel 1.1: Zoom to Man's eyes, they are cased like a South China Tiger, but are red.

Panel 2: Kwon is in front of a bank, robbers are standing in front of him, not sure of what to do.

Word Balloon, Robber #1: What the @!$# are you guys doing? Just shoot him!
Action, Robber #2 shoots Kwon, bullets bounce off the armor.
Word Balloon, Robber #3: Any other bright ideas?
Action, Robber #4 shoots an RPG at Kwon, the RPG turns into Fireworks, upon hitting him.
Word Balloon, Kwon: I am sure the people at this bank will not be happy to find their money gone.

Panel 3: Continuation of Panel 2
Word Balloon, Robber #2: So, we don't care.
Word Balloon, Kwon: Yes, but I do.
Action, Kwon raises his hands and then lowers them in a quick motion, sunlight, comes down in rays, burning the robbers hands.

Narration: It feels so good, to be back home, my family has long forgotten about me, I am but a branch in our tree. I am happy they are here, in the South, but I must go to the North, I must find away to unite my country.

Panel 4 (horizontal below 1-3): The man we saw in Panel 1, page 3, is now on a roof top, he looks more like a were-Tiger now, the a tattoo of his human self on the same forearm (where the tiger tat was).

Word Balloon, Man: Oh Haesik, I think you've spent too much time with that naive sister of yours. Unification, and peace, ha. Not before I finish you off, don't worry little Haesik, I'll send you back to Heaven alright..

Panel 5: Kwon is high above Korea, in his armor, he is ecstatic, free and happy. Floating in the clouds, we see musical notes of Arirang around him again.

Narration: The sun and the moon, are my powers, day and night, hot and cold. Best of all, I am free, I am not a God above the people, I am a God among my people!

End -

sparta28090

09-15-2009, 09:36 AM

Four Scripts already! with several days left....so if you are thinking of getting into the competition you still have time, so let's cracking gang!

I got to say that I am impressed with everyone's submission but you can tell that alot of shoveling is taking place (me included) and I know it's mainly due to the fact that so much is asked for in three pages.

Knowing this I have to ask artist that if the scripts are even possible to pencil as they are or if a few edits can get them in place. I have no one's thoughts on this if they do these script writings for fun or if they are trying to hone a skill, but speaking for myself, I have to say that I am doing it for both and if a person can do something they enjoy for profit then I think it's very important to know how do it properly.

I encourage any and everyone to post thoughts including critiques on what is being submitted. I notice that the artist do this to each other often and most respond being aware of it before hand, but they do take it with grace with the thoughts and action of improving, so I see no reason why this can't work in this medium as well.

sparta28090

09-16-2009, 07:16 PM

24 Hours Left...Still Time To Get Your Submissions In

Jae Namkyoung

09-17-2009, 02:19 AM

I'll admit to cramming a lot into three pages, literally I don't think half of these things can fit into the given panels. Just have to air them out is all. =] I'm entirely new to the script writing thing, so I wouldn't have a clue how to critique someone all the material submitted so far, seems very awesome.

sparta28090

09-17-2009, 07:58 PM

The poll for this challenge is up and running. Lots of fun and good scripts. Even though a new challenge will not begin to after this one ends....who is up for the challenge again? Please respond (that includes you too Ryan *****and mega-mega-thanks for submitting this fine creation!!)...so artists and writers speak up here or PM me if intrested in continuing this. In case you are wondering I say YES!

starkoryan81

09-18-2009, 05:40 AM

MailOrderClone

09-18-2009, 12:31 PM

I'd be more than happy to take part in this again. It's good fun and a nice distraction from the scripts I'd supposed to be doing. :biggrin:

Jae Namkyoung

09-18-2009, 03:53 PM

This was indeed fun, a wonderful chance for me to explore original material. I've been so wrapped up in creating my own DC Universe that this was most enjoyable, indeed. =]

king white

09-18-2009, 04:13 PM

Script Scrap is a great thread Sparta! I very much enjoy the things people have been doing on here and will definitely be contributing something once I get the chance.

sparta28090

09-20-2009, 07:20 PM

Script Scrap is a great thread Sparta! I very much enjoy the things people have been doing on here and will definitely be contributing something once I get the chance.

I am looking forward to when you get the time. I am also glad to see that the writers are already chomping at the bits to continue. I am looking forward to it as well!

sparta28090

09-23-2009, 10:59 PM

New Challenge Alert!

CALLING

1) HAESIK
2) POWERSTRIKE
3) THE AUTOMATIC MAN
4) IMPERIAL

This is a 3 page script challenge and here is the twist. You are to take your and Ryan's new creation and follow these guidelines in the 3 page challenge.

a) 4 Panels on Page 1
b) 2 panels on Page 2
c) 1 splash page on Page 3

THE PLOT Your character is in a social/career/family setting and suddenly an adversary appears and at the last page you choose victory/defeat/fleeing/what the____?/heck it's your script you choose, those are just suggestions. Also: please include a short paragraph describing your character's adversary as in powers or motivation....just what you feel a new reader should know for them to get the vibe of your script.

Challenge ends on Tuesday, September 29th at 9:00PM(EST). Also keep in mind that if an artist submits a new character to this thread it will start almost imediately (be on the look out for updates if this does happen)

http://i558.photobucket.com/albums/ss27/starkoryan81/RandomGuy.jpg

sparta28090

09-24-2009, 07:18 PM

Page 1

Panel 1: Panoramic shot from a bird's view of the top of your rendition of any mall USA
CAPTION: Atlas Mall, where you can find most anything you want for a.....price

Panel 2: Panoramic shot of 3 college-aged gents going down an esculator inside the mall. Ian (aka Imperial)(dressed in jeans and a Nirvana T-shirt) Matches (a short stout blonde lad wearing what he woke up in) Aces (Tall slim red haired fellow in a leather trench coat) The boys are oogling at a group of girls seated at the food court.

CAPTION: Good times, good friends.....priceless

Panel 3: The fellows have joined the attractive ladies at their table. Matches is showing off by doing a one-handed hand stand. Aces is acting cool while one of the girls is up against him looking all dreamily. Ian is distracted by looking at a strange man standing in a corner. the stranger appears to be pushing keys on a CGI green-neon lit computer screen hovering at the stranger's line of vision.

Matches: ....and when I won The State Wrestling Title I did this stunt on his head!
Girl #1 No wonder you couldn't get a date for the Prom, Matches...you show-off too much
Girl #2 (who is against Aces) <just show a heart in her speech balloon>
Girl #3 Ian, what are you....

Panel 4:

CAPTION: Sometimes, to get what you really and truly want you have to pay...

The focal point needs to be on the stranger as he is shown pointing at Ian (who has turned his back to run but his head is turned back witnessing these events) , while 2 demonic beings dressed like street punks with wide-slender-tooth grins have descended behind the stranger on hard-light wheel-less skateboards (as if flying across the stranger's shoulders) in the direction pointed at by the stranger

Caption: ...with evil

Page 2

Panel 1: We see Ian against a wall (divider from the restrooms to the food court), he is cackling with energy shredding the last bit of his civillian clothes with the energy where we see him as IMPERIAL. The other part of the panel is an open area where we see SoulSkaters side-by-side with their grins in place comming toward the concealed IMPERIAL

CAPTION: Sometimes, a good thing happens...

Panel 2: Imperial has came from his changing area and is doing a double clothes-line manuever on the SoulSkaters and they are at the apex of being of being taken off thier hard-light boards.

CAPTION: ...when paved with evil intentions

Page 3

Caption: But is your life worth...

Backshot of Imperial hovering, the SoulSkaters are in a state of decay (being removed from their boards does this) laying around. Imperial's posture seems to convey a sever lack of enthusiasm as a huge almost total black armoured samuri is standing before him with a great Ebony sword raised in a death-strike fashion.

Brimsword: DIE BOY! AND YOUR POWER WILL CROWN ME!

CAPTION: ....THE PRICE?

sparta28090

09-24-2009, 07:56 PM

I hope the other writers are intrested in doing this latest challenge, but I do have to admit that it has an underlying intention.

This challenge is to try and make the scripts as doable as possible as deemed by sequential artist. I do admit that during the challenges I have a severe problem of flooding the pages with panels. This is something that I noticed with some of the other writers as well. I am quite sure that this would be eliminated of the page count was raised from 3, but I have kept it at 3 for 2 simple reasons. 3 pages is what CBR did when they use to do these challenges and also for the reason of keeping the scripts short to keep readers intrested, instead of flooding the challenges with massive pages (but I may upgrade the page count...if I get enough of complaints from writers, readers and artist...so please speak up on this thread if you want this).

What I learned during this challenge. This was a challenge! I had to do some weeding, some trimming, some revision till I got what I ended up posting, so I felt like I have grown some as a scripter.

Now...I want to hear from YOU on this thread on the script and you don't have to be an artist....but did this script seem to be descriptive enough? if you are an artist is this doable?...I want to hear from anyone...don't worry about hurting my feelings. I want to hear from anyone so I am going to give shoutouts. Ryan, MailOrderClone, Joe Arco, Jae Namkyoung, Viktor, Lew, King, Howyadoin (where has he been?) and anyone else that cares too. I want to learn...improve what needs to improve, continue what works, and to learn what I may need to learn....so, thanks in advance!...and fellow writers I hope you try this challenge to.

Joe Acro

09-24-2009, 08:28 PM

I want to learn...improve what needs to improve, continue what works, and to learn what I may need to learn....so, thanks in advance!...and fellow writers I hope you try this challenge to.
I like it when we have the same prompt, no matter how simple or complex. Simple allows for different interpretations and greater variety. Complex is a way of making us better writers, working in the details of the prompt while still being inventive and unique.

Early on, you gave us multiple prompts to choose from. It allowed for variety, sure. However, it doesn't really give people a way to compare the scripts presented.

MailOrderClone

09-24-2009, 10:24 PM

The Automatic Man: The Daily Grind

Page 1
The panels are situated across the page, spanning the entirety of the page, one on top of the next.

Panel 1
Establishing shot, outside of an office building in the foggy early morning. Sunlight is hazy and the greenery of the near-by park is difficult to see through the fog. The words Moorhen Software is written in professional black lettering on one side of the building’s door.

CAPTION

Panel 2
We see The Automatic Man sitting at an office desk. He is dressed plainly, wearing a white dress shirt, black slacks, and a purple and orange striped tie, though his odd facial markings give away that he is, in fact, him. One hand is sitting on the arm of his chair, while the other taps on the keyboard of his computer. His legs are crossed at the ankles and slung up on the edge of his desk.

CAPTION [So, here I am. The brilliant self-made man, The Automatic Man, forced to take on the form of Tamber Notabadguy. Not the most ingenious name ever, but a serviceable one.]

Panel 3
The view has changed to the opposing angle as the last panel, aiming out toward the majority of the office. There is a very burly person standing there, with short brown hair and a brown mustache, and all stuffed into a charcoal gray suit that is a bit too small for him. He is The Malevolent Mustache (wait until you’re done laughing to continue), and he is also a supervillain. Also, at this instant, he is not a happy camper.

CAPTION [My boss, Mr. Malevolent Mustache. Also a villain. He can kill you a hundred ways with his mustache.]

MUSTACHE: “Tamber, we have a situation.”

AUTOMATIC MAN: “Look, if it’s about the TPS Reports…”

MUSTACHE: “Walk with me.”

Panel 4
Odd fish-eye view here. The Malevolent Mustache leads with The Automatic Man a step behind and off to one side. The other office workers, including a tentacle-armed purple and green blob of goo who is an alien and is named Rick, look over from their cubicles.

CAPTION [In fact, most of us are villains in some way. Moorhen Software is well-known as a place where active criminals can get steady work.]

[B]Page 2
Panel 1 takes up most of the top half of the page, and panel 2 is the bottom half. Panel 2 is slightly larger.

Panel 1
The Automatic Man and The Malevolent Mustache stand in the background as we see a superhero floating in the air, holding one of the male employees by the neck with one hand. This superhero is wearing the classic tights, boots, belt and cape combo, although all of them are in a dark shade of red. Brick red, which makes sense given that his name is The Flying Brick. He seems to have come in through the wall, given the large hole that happens to be there and the bits of rubble laying around. The scene is seen from the floor, making the superhero, the focus of the panel, all the more imposing.

FLYING BRICK: “You’re going to jail for a long time, scumbag.”

EMPLOYEE: “Wait! I-I didn’t do anything.”

AUTOMATIC MAN: “Just what in the world do you think you’re doing?”

CAPTION: [The Flying Brick. Superhero. Strong as an ox and practically invincible. He tends to hurl himself through things. Thus the name.]

Panel 2
The Flying Brick is in mid-air still, but he has turned toward The Automatic Man. Likewise, he is still holding the nondescript worker up with just one hand.

FLYING BRICK: “This man is wanted for stealing the Fat Accountant Statuette from the Seventh National Museum. You’re going down hard for this one, Reggie Snivel.”

AUTOMATIC MAN: “Oh, that’s what this is about.”

FLYING BRICK: “What?”

AUTOMATIC MAN: “This is Carl Coletta. Reggie changes what he looks like every couple of weeks, and I guess he committed a crime looking like Carl here. That thoughtless jerk of a guy.”

FLYING BRICK: “I see.”

CAPTION: [Fortunately, The Flying Brick has one exploitable weakness. He is pants-on-head stupid.]

AUTOMATIC MAN: "I'll tell you what. You go ahead and put Carl down, and go look for Reggie, and we'll forget about this massive hole you just made in our wall. Sound good?"

FLYING BRICK: "I can live with that."

Page 3
Splash page!
The Flying Brick has flown out of the hole in the wall and flies off into the clearing morning sky, which is an interesting shade of orange. The employee has landed on the ground, on his backside, and The Automatic Man reached out a hand to help him up. The Malevolent Mustache stands to the left, only barely in the panel. All three of them are backlit.

FLYING BRICK (very small, in a very small speech bubble): “What a nice guy.”

EMPLOYEE: “Man that was close.”

AUTOMATIC MAN: “You’re going to need to lay low for a while, Reggie. The capes aren’t going to be fooled for long. Not even that one.”

MUSTACHE: “Wonderful, problem’s solved. Now get back to work.”

sparta28090

09-25-2009, 06:57 PM

Way to go MailOrderClone. You did the challenge very, very well! Your story is very descriptive, orginal, funny, and best of all self-contained with a beginning to end.

It has a "Tick" feel without the over-the-top antics, and the orginality is somewhat like Mark Waid's EMPIRE (which is a story where the bad guy won...now he is stuck with keeping it all going and retaining his rule).

I like this very much!

MailOrderClone

09-26-2009, 02:38 AM

Thank you for that Sparda. I'm happy that you like it. The Tick has always been a major inspiration for any tights & capes story that I write, mainly as a result of my own inability to take anything completely seriously. I haven't read Empire yet, although I have heard of it and the concept of a world where the villains have already won and gotten past the triumphent malevolent laughter phase does sound interesting.

Joe Acro

09-26-2009, 04:53 PM

Continuation of previous pages.

Page 4

Panel 1: Powerstrike punches an enemy in the face.

Narration: It's my fault they're here. I should've stopped them then...

Panel 3: Flashback. A person presenting a smiling Powerstrike to the public on an outdoor stage. A figure can be seen behind stage looking at the proceedings.

Person: "Let's hear it for our hero!"

Panel 3, inset of Panel 2: Close-up on the figure behind stage.

Panel 4: Enemy behind stage leaps forward.

Page 5
Two panels, both vertical.

Panel 1: Enemy kills the presenter.

Panel 2: Powerstrike kills an enemy.

Narration (across panels): The deaths are on my hands.

Page 6:

Single panel: Powerstrike unleashes energy on multiple enemies.

Narration: Now the only deaths will be theirs.

sparta28090

09-26-2009, 09:56 PM

Joe, You crafty son of a gun! If the challenges of Ryan's sketch (your POWERSTRIKE) continue, you could easily end up with a total scripted issue.

I hope you don't mind....but I will keep that in mind when making new challenges and participating as well....way to go!

Joe Acro

09-26-2009, 09:58 PM

I hope you don't mind....but I will keep that in mind when making new challenges and participating as well....way to go!
Ah, I see. You're going to make it difficult for me to continue that trend.:wink:

Jae Namkyoung

09-26-2009, 10:54 PM

Page 4: Notation, two weeks later.

Narration: Here I am, in the very millet fields where I was killed, so many years ago.

Panel 1: Haesik holds the bloodied St. George medal, he's in an old army jacket, with a black shirt, and cargo khaki's, combat boots. He's standing, wind blowing through his hair.

Word Balloon: Arirang, Arirang, Arariyo... Arirang gogaero neomeoganda.

Panel 2: He's walking toward the road, in the distance we notice a female figure, blurred from this point.

Word Balloon: Nareul beorigo gasineun nimeun. Simnido motgaseo balbyeongnanda

Panel 3: Haesik's voice carries, we can see the female closer now, it is Dalsun, she is wearing a simple white coat, and turtle neck, beige pants and shoes to match. Her voice meets his.

Word Balloon: Cheongcheonghaneuren byeoldo manko. Urine gaseumen kkumdo manta

Narration: I sing in sadness, so much blood was spilled, it angers me greatly. I cannot help, but fight the tears that overwhelm me, as I sing.

Panel 4 (horizontal, full below panels 1-3): Haesik is on his knees, clutching Dalsun's clothing, focus from a right angle, his face in tears, his anguish.

Word Balloon: Jeogi jeo sani Baekdusaniraji. Dongji seotdaredo kkonman pinda

Page 5:

Narration: We drove, and drove away from this place, and all I hear in my head are the cries of my people. Who cry, yearning to be whole, and it hurts me so much. All I can see is the death and blood the war created.

Panel 1 (half page): Man-Tiger, from page 3 (panel 1) is standing in the middle of the road, he is in his Were-tiger form. A red and black coat with loose silk black pants, and matching shoes. He is roaring.

Word Balloon: HAESIK!

Panel 2 (half page): Man-Tiger stands firm, we see car stop, with door open, Haesik's boots on the ground, Haesik responds.

Word Balloon: Tiger.

Page 6: Full Splash, of the country side, from a full view, Man Tiger stands feet away from Haesik, both staring each other down.

Narration: Tiger, of greed, of hate, and evil. I sent him to hell once, and I'll do it again. Long ago, when Korea was just born, he killed my family, my Mother, the Sky, and my Father the Earth, staining the millet fields red with their blood. My sister the Sun and I the Moon, escaped on a rope to Heaven, and he was sent to hell for his actions. I will battle him again and again until he no longer roams this Earth, until he can NO LONGER, cause destruction and hate among man kind.

[ Here is the link to the English translation of Arirang, or one of the many but this is most common version of the song ( http://www.getalyric.com/listen/7FlXH9CGnvw/arirang_sung_by_ri_kyong_suk_) ]

http://img199.imageshack.us/img199/9457/mantiger1.th.png (http://img199.imageshack.us/i/mantiger1.png/)

Actor is Lee Byung-heon of South Korea.

Note, the scripts themselves are deeply rooted in Korean Mythology, and have been changed to create the tale you've seen in the past challenges.

sparta28090

09-28-2009, 05:34 PM

ARTIST WILD CARD CHALLENGE

Yes! We have our second artist wildcard challenge! Ryan has provided us with a very nice original sketch....Thank you my friend!

The Challenge: Do a 3 page sequential script of the original character where you do their origin, name them, and manifest their power. These are the only rules except for a deadline of Saturday, October 3rd at 9:00 PM.

Please note he has posted this picture on his art thread...please look it over for he has a wild tale about how the backgrounds came to fruition. Since we are so lucky to have someone post some of their hard work please participate and PLEASE NOTE ANYONE CAN ENTER THIS CHALLENGE! if there are ENOUGH of entries we will have a poll inwhich everyone can vote on their favorite...so get busy and post something!

http://i558.photobucket.com/albums/ss27/starkoryan81/Crazymancrazy.jpg

sparta28090

09-29-2009, 01:31 AM

MYSTIC MYSTERIES #29

PAGE 1

PANEL 1

Caption: The Ghost Zone...
Caption: A place where the innocent are kept...
Caption: Because they were touched by evil

This is an 80% splash page that will be doted with a few thumbnail panels. This is an abstract land where natural laws sometimes don't apply, please use your artistic muscle in making whatever you want. The focal point needs to be a huge castle that is well-lit in shadowy backgrounds. The architecture looks like a builder on acid had created it. Some suggestions: stepping stones that stand on their own in the air leading to said castle. Trees that grow upside down with scraggley roots as branches with lush greenery (leaves) around the base of the trees. a spear chasing a warrior gnome, winged horses, a skeleton hanging a princess

Caption: The Ghost Zone is not unlike our own world, for we do the same and we call them..

Caption: ...Mental Wards...
Small panel 1: a person in a straight-jacket slobbering on their self in a padded room

Caption: ...Hospitals for the dieing
Small Panel 2: a person in a hospital bed, with an oxygen mask

Panel 2:
Caption: The Ghost Zone holds Vampires, Werewolves, and Mummies. All innocent humans until they were cursed by the stuff of ghost stories.

Panoramic side profile shot of a Mummy (it would be funny if you did King-Tutt from the old Batman 60's show...not prudent, but funny) a werewolf, and a vampire. Each housed in a glass tube like a ship in a bottle

Panel 3:
Caption: Even the Unknown
A blackout panoramic shot all we see is a close-up of Ryan's creation from where his nose should be to the top of where his brow should be. His eyes need to be the focal point of this shot as in huge. The right eye needs to be blue and the left needs to be orange/light brown

Page 2

Panel 1: A panoramic shot of a lab like you would imagine Dr. Frankenstein's to be...but there would also be computers, knobs, and gadgets around. Two scientist stand in front of a black box that is a cell with no windows only a slot where Ryan's creation still looks on. The taller of the doctors (Dr. Knick) is slim with an academic look about him, his chin is resting on his hand in thought. The other (Professer Tuck) is much shorter and he has a bowl haircut and wears thick glasses, his arms are not in an usual state as he appears fidgeity.

Tuck: Are you sure Pandora's Box can hold him?
Knick: Of course it can or he would already be gone...so what else do we know about this "Unknown"
Tuck: According to The Capture Zone, he teleports through manifested hell-fire. The Enforcement Zone reports nothing hurts him or slows him down.

Panel 2: A neat desktop with a folder on it and we see a hand pointing to it.

Knick (Off Panel) I know all of that! it's right here you imbecile. What about his mother, his father, and does he have....

Panel 3: Headshot of Prof. Tuck He has a look of terror
Knick (Off panel) The Death Tongue?!!

Panel 4: Both of the scientist are face to face. Knick is upset and impatient, Tuck is scared and looks slightly to the floor.

Tuck: We have no evidence...but Pandora's intrest does make it more than a theory.
Knick: I concor. Power and loss seem to follow her
Tuck: Something else too. Earth's Dr. Architect informed me the god stick is...
Knick: Wait!...did you have Pandora's Box cleaned before we....

Panel 5: Same as panel 1 but both doctors are looking at the box and where the Unknown's eyes were is a plume of smoke

Knick: ...used it. Damn you to your house Tuck! You left him in there with hope!

Page 3

Splash Page A grave under a full moon there is a faint mist over the plot . The branches stretch like fingers that belong to angry old men throughout the cemetary. Ryan's creation is standing over the grave holding a long knarled stick that has a point that looks like it was whitted. There is a tombstone that says in large letters Allistar Crawley

Ryan's Creation: You! lieing there, Nothing dead can resist me. Tell me of my sister

Allistar: My son, your sister is at my church waiting to be sacrificed like you should have been. Her death will give me life and rule.

Ryan's Creation: I am not your son, I am Torment, for that is all I knew...but today I know Hope, but before I go...tell me...how does hell feel?

***Whoah Nellie! Hell? Ghost Zone? Pandora?....What a can CBR Comics has opened. Tune in to Torment#1 brought to you by pencil-perfect-Ryan, farter-starter Sparta and learn about The Death Tongue, the god stick, Dr. Architect , that @$$hole Allistar Crawley, Knick & Tuck, and alittle more on The Super Zone home of the Ghost Zone, Enforcemt Zone, and Capture Zone. Be sure to pick up all of the variant covers by, Lew, Quietly, Viktor, Alex Ross, King White, and the uber-rare coffee filter cover by Ryan Himself! All comics will be bagged with trading cards in each one!

Jae Namkyoung

09-29-2009, 02:50 AM

Semyaza

Page 1:

Panel 1: Cold, ice, frost. Cavern, multitude of people, all dead is what we notice. Upper left hand corner notation. 1964, Hell.

Narration: I am not human. I look human, but appearances can be very deceiving. I am neither good nor evil, I am fallen.

Panel 2: Focus on a 'Jason' look-a-like, he is semi-transparent.

Narration: I go between realms, realities, dimensions, and planes of existence. I do not guide, I am not here to help you. I am here for your soul, and it goes to the highest bidder, heaven, hell, purgatory, limbo, they all exist, and so do I.

Panel 3: Same focus on the character, as a darken teleport affect, engulfs the character.

Narration: My name is Semyaza, my abilities are countless and numerous, for you human, you may call me, “Samuel.” I doubt, my Father will be pleased, but I've long ago, forgotten to care of his thoughts.

Panel 4 (Quarter page): Interstate Highway 35, from San Marcus to San Antonio. Sam, is in a sweat shirt, and jeans. He's standing beside a broken down Dodge Challenger, hitchhiking.

Action, cars are approaching.
Word Balloon, Sam: Hey! Hey! I just-

Panel 5 (below Panel 4, full horizontal): A car stops, a young black woman looks over across the seats.

Word Balloon, Woman: Look like, you could use a ride.
Word Balloon, Sam: Yeah, yeah I can, where you headed?
Word Balloon, Woman: Victoria, but I'm stopping in San Antonio, you?
Word Balloon, Sam: San Antonio, sounds great.

Narration: She won't make it to San Antonio. God wants her soul.

Page 2:

Panel 1 (half page splash): The car from Page 1, Panel 5, is seen rolled over on the highway. The woman is looking at Sam, Sam's hand is inside her body.

Word Balloon, Sam: Count your blessings, kid. God saved you.

Panel 2 (half page splash): Sam above the wreck, holding the woman's soul (transparent version of the woman). Sam is looking up at the sky.

Word Balloon, Sam: She's all yours.
Narration: They don't all get lucky, there are other fallen angels, and there are also humans who know of us. For the record, Dante was one of those humans, and he was not trying to amuse you when he wrote of hell. He was giving you a tour.

Page 3:

Title Splash: Semyaza's Texas Tour

Panel 1 (full horizontal 33% of Page): Sam is in a long dark cloak, with a hood over him, a machete in one hand a glove on the other. He's standing in front of the Alamo, with a Chevy '60 Camaro behind him, it's modified with an eerie look from what we can see.

Narration: I am on the Surface once more, to collect the souls that have been waged upon. I believe the phrase in this place would be, 'yippee ki yay'

Panel 2 (full horizontal, 33% of Page): Sam is walking in the shadows of San Antonio. He's transparent, his hood falls to reveal his face, to which a sickening grin is upon it. Scars mark his face, as does a symbol on his forehead marking the fallen.

Narration: I'm going to have fun with this gentleman.

Panel 3: No longer transparent he now stands in front of a police officer, his cloak is a hoodie now, the same sickening grin. We notice the machete ready to strike, and his gloved hand burning bright.

Word Balloon, Sam: Lucifer awaits you.

Panel 4: The machete slices through the police officer, and the gloved hand, now engulfed in flames is retrieving the officer's soul.

Word Balloon, Sam: Your sins amuse me.

Panel 5: Transparent and cloacked, once more, his hood covers his face, the machete is gone, however he now holds the officer's soul in his hand that burns like a torch.

Word Balloon, Sam: Tell him, Semyaza sent you.

sparta28090

10-02-2009, 02:43 PM

A little over 24 hours left for submission....time to get busy

Joe Acro

10-02-2009, 03:22 PM

A little over 24 hours left for submission....time to get busy
Indeed it is!

I'll provide something tomorrow.

king white

10-02-2009, 06:56 PM

We interupt this thread briefly to bring you an important message from the Malevolent Mustache!
http://i297.photobucket.com/albums/mm219/williamcoreycharles/moustache.jpg

Joe Acro

10-03-2009, 08:00 AM

The Silence

Page 1:

The character fights a small group of goons. He is winning.

Page 2:

Panel 1: Binocular-shaped shot of the last panel of the previous page.

"Found you."

Panel 2: A grizzled man on a rooftop, with a woman behind him. He is lower the binoculars.

Lady: "Who is he?"

Panel 3: Man glares at lady.

Panel 4: Man turns away, holding onto the edge of the rooftop.

Man: "He is the Silence, or so he's been called. He's mute, so he can't hardly name himself. I should know. I made him that way."

Lady: "Sir!"

Page 3:

Close-up of man's face fading into series of flashback images.

"He's leftover from my early days. His father owed me money. Claimed he didn't have it. I threatened to kill his family if he didn't pay up. Still claimed he didn't have it. I ended up killing him, his wife, and his little girl. That kid, though. He got away. I was starting to slit his throat when the cops arrived. Losing his family and voice drove him crazy. Made him into this deadly vigilante."

Other half of man's face, after flashbacks.

"I have to kill him. Then I can move past my dumb past mistakes."

sparta28090

10-03-2009, 05:22 PM

A total of 3 scripts so far....but there is still time to post.

A big huge thanks to King White for contributing to MailOrderClone's script! I hope you continue to add whenever you feel like it....because you are always welcomed and I hope other artist follow suit.

jlmoor

10-03-2009, 07:00 PM

Okay, so I always miss these things and swore I would do something for the next one. You did say (and I quote) anyone could submit, so, well, you asked for it. I found out about this contest about an hour ago, so it was more of an excercise in speed scripting (since the deadline is in 30 min). As such all panel layout is artists choice (as I didn't have time to map it out:smile: )I'm new to this so apologies in advance if it is a bit rough. Okay, very rough. Also, it kind of got away from me, so if superhero was the theme, well I started to go there but totally wound up somewhere else. Many apologies to the artist.

Helicopter Parents

Panel 1: Night. Over the shoulder shot of a bloody and mutilated body of a teenage boy lying in a puddle. It is raining heavily causing the blood from the body to mix with the mud and rain in the puddle.

Cass (OP): “Aw God.”

Panel 2: Worms eye view of a bloody broken fence post hitting the ground in the foreground, the body lying in the mud in the background. The body is badly beaten with one eye missing and the mouth agape.

Panel 3: Distance birds eye view shot of panel 1. We see Cass and the body he is standing over are in the outfield of a long abandoned baseball field that has only a few stray patches of dying grass left on it.

Cass: “Aw God.” (very small balloon and lettering)

Panel 4: Long shot of Cass leaning up against the dilapidated chain link fence near the dugout. He is doubled over clutching his stomach. He is wearing that freaky Hannibal Lector mask thing, a dirty hooded sweatshirt and gloves. His long dark hair is plastered to the mask from the rain.

Cass (SFX): UNGHHH

Panel 5: Shot from behind Cass as he walks back across the field towards the body.

Panel 6: Close up of Cass picking up the fence post, the body can just barely be made out in the background

Panel 7: Close up on the mangled face of the body as Cass hits it across the jaw with the fencepost causing the already grotesque face to be further distorted.

Cass: “Bastard!”

Pg. 2

Panel 1: Same night. Long shot of the front of a house. There is a porch swing and large front window that is lit. In the foreground is a white picket fence with a picket missing. Cass is walking through a gate in the fence toward the front porch. There are overturned bicycles in the front yard as well as other children’s toys.

Kerri (from the window): “Toby! Mom said dinner five minutes ago!”
Sharon (from window): “Kerri stop yelling. Besides we're waiting for your father, I just heard the car pull up.”

Panel 2: Int. house, living room. Wide shot from behind Cass as he walks through the front door. Kerri (14) is sitting sideways in a Lazy-Boy chair reading Teen Beat and blowing a bubble. Sharon is approaching Cass:

Sharon: “Hi honey!”
Cass (OP): “Hi Sharon, how was your day?”

Panel 3: Full side shot of Sharon and Cass as they stand a few feet away from each other. Toby is in the background with a smile running up to greet
Cass. Sharon has a look of shock on her face. Cass is staring at the floor looking ashamed.

Sharon: “Good god! You look awful! Didn’t you remember your umbrella! Oh you’re dripping all over the carpet Go change, go change. Dinner’s on the table.”
Cass: "Yes dear"

Panel 4: Side shot of the family sitting down to dinner. Kerri is still reading her magazine, fork in hand, food dripping off it onto the table cloth. Sharon is daintily cutting her meat. Cass is shoving a fork of mashed potatoes in his mouth with a blank disconnected expression on his face. Toby is excitedly prattling on.

Toby: “And then Mitch said that Wolverine could totally annihilate Spiderman….
Kerri: “Do you even know what annihilate means dweeb?”
Toby: …shut up Kerri. And I said no way because…”
Sharon: “Toby, don’t tell your sister to shut up.”
Toby: “Sorry mom.... No way because Spiderman can just like web him up and drop him in a river. And then Mitch was like “that’s stupid” and I was like “N…”

Panel 5: Medium close up of Cass. The room looks dark behind him and he has an almost zombie like expression on his face. He has a fork full of food that he hold in front of him. He is looking straight ahead but his eyes seem unfocused.

Cass: “Toby?”
Toby (OP): “Yeah dad?”
Cass: “Can we just have a quiet minute? Just for a minute, I have a bit of a head ache kiddo. Just need a little quiet. You can tell me your story at bedtime okay?”
Toby (OP): “Uh….’kay dad.”

Pg. 3

Panel 1: Two shot of the backs of Cass and Sharon as they stand at the sink washing dishes.

Sharon: “You were awfully curt with Toby don’t you think?”
Cass: “Sorry honey.”
Sharon: “He’s just a boy you know, it’s good he wants to tell us about his day.”
Cass: “Yes honey”

Panel 2: Cass’ face is in the extreme foreground on the left side of the panel as we see Sharon’s face from the side in the middle ground. The two are still washing dishes. Sharon is concentrated on the plate she is drying, Cass’ expression is still blank.

Sharon: “Kerri seems to be getting over that boy. So glad that business is over.”
Cass: “Yeah. Glad it’s over. She’s doing better. Good.”
Sharon: “Those boys can be so cruel.”
Cass:(very small lettering) “Yeah. Had it comin’.”

Panel 3: Close up of Sharon’s face. She is looking down into the sink still cleaning away.

Sharon: “Break a girl’s heart like that by asking that slut to the dance”
Cass (OP): “yeah.”
Sharon: “Don’t these boys understand how sensitive girls are at that age?”
\ Cass: “Yeah.”
Sharon: “*sigh* It’s a good thing she has us. Otherwise who knows how she would have handled it.”

Panel 4: Reverse angle of panel 3 so that Sharon’s face is in the extreme foreground to the far right, Cass in the middle ground. Same expressions.

Sharon: “Oh, and can you believe that Mitch boy at Toby’s school? Honestly! Absolutely no regard for poor Toby’s self esteem.”
Cass: “The Spiderman thing?”
Sharon: “Of course the Spiderman thing! How is poor Toby supposed to learn with that kind of hostility day after day. I really think you should do something about it.”
Cass: “I’ll talk to the boy tomorrow….
Sharon: “No, no, no. We have PTA tomorrow. I think you should go over there tonight and deal with it Cass.”
Cass: “Alright dear.”

Panel 4: Long shot of the front of the house again. It is still raining. Cass is walking toward the fence gate. Sharon is running out behind him, she is holding a magazine over her head to block the rain and in her other hand she is holding something we can’t make out.

Sharon: “Sweetie! Sweetie wait!”
Cass: “Huh?”

Panel 5: Over Cass’s shoulder we see Sharon. She is smiling and holding up the mask and bloody fence post.

Sharon: “Honestly, you’d forget your head if it wasn’t’ screwed on.”

Panel 6: Very narrow all black frame across the bottom.

Sharon (CAP): “……and pick up some coffee filters while you’re out.”

Indigo Al

10-06-2009, 08:40 AM

would you guys mind if I submitted a late Wild Card Artist entry? I know it'll be out of the contest running, but insipiration just hit me!

sparta28090

10-06-2009, 10:59 AM

Post anything Indigo Al, just keep us in the loop of the challenge you are posting, in case your entry was to get buried in other entries for other challenges. . . .and keep an eye open for further challenges

Indigo Al

10-07-2009, 02:17 PM

The Challenge: Do a 3 page sequential script of the original character where you do their origin, name them, and manifest their power. These are the only rules except for a deadline of Saturday, October 3rd at 9:00 PM.

Please note he has posted this picture on his art thread...please look it over for he has a wild tale about how the backgrounds came to fruition. Since we are so lucky to have someone post some of their hard work please participate and PLEASE NOTE ANYONE CAN ENTER THIS CHALLENGE! if there are ENOUGH of entries we will have a poll inwhich everyone can vote on their favorite...so get busy and post something!

This is very crude and subject to much revision. I got very lazy with the paneling descriptions. I'm mostly worried if it's a good horror concept and if it makes sense to folks. Thanks!

Lovers Lane McCurt
PAGE ONE

[The setting is a small wooden shed, full of farming tools, and many things you might find in a Saw movie. We see a good looking teen boy, bloodied and battered and gagged, strapped to a table. Before him stands a 50-something man with a preacher’s collar, and an overweight teenager, face full of anxiety.]

Teenager: “Re-reverend Pharris? This – you can’t do this!”

Reverend Pharris: “It’s already done, Dennis….would you hand me the nails?”

[Dennis hands Reverend Pharris the nails]

Dennis: “Wh-what are you going to do?”

Panel 3: “Dennis, Dennis --- you’re a good boy. God clearly loves you. So be thankful, because to start with, I’m about to end your torment! Or do you want to have your head slammed against the side of a locker for 3 more years? Perhaps you like it when the pretty cheerleaders twitter mockingly every time you walk by their table in the cafeteria?”

[Reverend Pharris grabs the Lecter-mask and stares at it with a far away smile.]

PAGE TWO

[Reverend Pharris stands before the bound and gagged boy, ranting]

Reverend Pharris: “And you! Mr. Oscar McCurt! I bet you never thought it would come to this, DID you!”

[Reverend Pharris grabs a sinister occult looking tome]

Reverend Pharris: “They call you Lovers Lane McCurt, don’t they? How many notches, Mr. McCurt? How many girlfriends? How many ‘hot moms’? How many dirty little pictures have been sent to your cell phone???”

[Closeup of the Reverend’s face, with an angry deranged look]

Reverend Pharris: “HOW MUCH SICK FILTHY RUTTING IN THOSE DARK BACK WOODS ARE YOU GUILTY OF????”

[Reverend Pharris opens the tome. Oscar twitches from side to side]

Reverend Pharris: “Nebulus incantum oranas – you’re fortunate, though – that for ALL your filthy sinning, you are about to become the ultimate instrument of God’s Love. Infernum etcilis akathen…”

Dennis: “R-reverend – isn’t that buh-black magic you’re using?”

[The Reverend turns to Dennis]

Reverend Pharris: “God’s plan is revealed to me in the most mysterious of ways Dennis! People see the rule of Satan in everything, but Satan has no real power! Everything in existence comes from God! And where people see ‘darkness’ or ‘the devil’ in your so-called horror movies, I see only the loving hand of God, striking down the fornicating sinners, executing the punishments of Hell here on earth! Your ‘Freddies,’ your ‘Jasons’ – they are the ANGELS come to deliver us, Dennis!”

[The Reverend places the Lecter mask on Oscar’s face and poises a nail on the forehead.]

[Cut to the Reverend’s deranged face, hammer raised above his head]

Reverend Pharris: “Will YOU, Lovers Lane McCurt, be the instrument of God’s love on Earth!”

[Cut away from the action, maybe suggest in shadows – the hammer coming down, a hard “Thwack!”, the nail going into Oscar’s skull and a piercing muffled scream].

PAGE THREE

[The Reverend reading the black magic tome above the masked body of Oscar. Dennis crouching on a corner, sobbing into his hands]

Reverend Pharris: “Aethyr satanicus, mellefic EST!”

[Reverend Pharris turns to Dennis, with a deranged smile]

Reverend Pharris: “And now – the virgin sacrifice!”