TheLastBard
01-27-2009, 04:23 PM
CBR limits us to 10k, so I'll put this in two postings... I wrote this up as a freelance submission to Avatar to see if they would like to hire me, even if just to finish this story! Enjoy!
NOTE: DO NOT USE WITHOUT PERMISSION
THE LIVING DEAD: DEAD ON ARRIVAL
BY: ERIK HENDRIX
thelastbard@yahoo.com
http://thelastbardsblog.blogspot.com
http://lastbard.deviantart.com
PAGE ONE (Two Panels)
Panel 1. A 747 flying though thick clouds, heavy rain, and lightning all around (some way too close to the plane). Angled image to give the impression that the plane is not flying perfectly straight (turbulence). Plane labeled with fake airline logos for Northern Airlines - Pacific Connection, flight 842.
Panel 2. View from a seat in coach looking up at the little air dial, the no smoking light and the fasten your seatbelts light which has just lit up. The square compartment for the air masks is closed in the center.
SFX:
DING!
RADIO (Stewardess):
Our captain has just requested for everyone to please return to your seats and please fasten your seatbelts. We are experiencing a little bit of turbulence.
PAGE TWO (Five Panels)
Panel 1. Same POV, but Dr. Evans’ right hand is messing with the air, frantically trying to get more air out of the already maxed out vent. Motion in the shot from the plane shaking in the storm.
Panel 2. View Dr. Evans from the seat in front of him. He is looking forwards, sweat on his brow as his right hand arcs awkwardly down, feeling sick due to the motion of the plane. His left hand is clenched tight on his briefcase against his chest. He is crammed between an exceptionally fat man (Roy - his left) and woman (Wanda - his right), barely enough room to gesture, let alone reach for an air vent. The man to his left appears to be sleeping and the woman to his right has her hand on the slide to open the little window cover so she can see outside.
Panel 3. Nervously, Dr. Evans positions the briefcase onto his lap flat and clicks open the locks.
SFX:
Click! Click!
Panel 3. View from the aisle looking in towards Dr. Evans’. His head is cocked slightly to the side and he tries to contort to looks into the barely open briefcase without letting anyone else see what is inside. Barely visible is an orange bag with a biohazard symbol on it and, written in sharpie, “tissue samples 08-13-2005”. Slivers of duct tape hold the visible corners of the bag to the inside of the brief case.
Dr. Evans:
Ahhh…
Panel 4. Same POV, but Dr. Evans’ head is back up and he’s looking around with a look of relief on his face. The fat woman to his right has opened the window and is looking out into the storm, raindrops buffeting the window. It’s dark outside and her head is cocked in that direction. A flash of lightning is visible in the distance. The plane continues to rumble with turbulence.
WANDA:
Roy, check this out!
ROY:
Wha?
WANDA:
Lean your fat head and look out!
Panel 5. View from outside in the rain looking into the window, the window taking up most of the frame. Other windows are visible, but all are closed. Dr. Evans has leaned a little back in his chair so Roy can lean towards the window without getting overly friendly. Beyond Roy, we can see the middle and opposite side of the plane where most people are looking forward, concerned looks on their faces because of the turbulence. On the far side, Alan is visible, head back, eyes closed, and a relaxed look on his face ~ all in a day’s work. He is wearing a sports coat over a red button up shirt and khakis.
PAGE THREE (Five Panels)
Panel 1. Camera pans back into the plane, closing in on Alan, still looking relaxed. The motion from the plane’s turbulence intensifies.
Panel 2. View from outside the plane again, view from beyond the back of the plane looking forward at a slight angle. A thick bolt of lightning hits the top of the plane about a third of the way back, the arc of the bolt is visible on top, arcing to the left engine, and continuing on into the depths below the plane.
SFX:
CRACK!
Panel 3.
Same view as before looking at Alan, but his eyes snap open suddenly.
Panel 4. From his POV looking at the passengers. Everyone is looking around frantically, some looking like they just woke up. Dr. Evans is visible on the other side of the plane, briefcase clenched tightly again to his chest.
RANDOM PERSON 1:
What was that?
RANDOM PERSON 2:
Did you hear that?
RANDOM PERSON 3:
What the fuck?
RANDOM PERSON 4:
Huh?
RANDOM PERSON 5 (burst):
Stewardess!
RANDOM PERSON 6:
Have you ever felt turbulence this severe?
Panel 5. Same POV, but the lights go out and only the light coming in from the bolts of lightning outside cast any light in the cab.
RANDOM PERSON 1 (burst):
SHIT?
RANDOM PERSON 2 (burst):
FUCK!
RANDOM PERSON 3:
Neil?
RANDOM PERSON 4:
Stewardess?
RANDOM PERSON 5:
OHSHITOHSHITOHSHIT!!!
RANDOM PERSON 6:
Mommy?
PAGE FOUR (Four Panels)
Panel 1. View from the nose of the plane looking back at the left engine which is on fire and sputtering, not sure if it wants to stall out or explode. Figures of the pilot and co-pilot are partially visible in the front windows, but it’s dark in there.
PILOT:
Mayday! Mayday! This is Northern Airlines flight 842 en route to Los Angeles, engine has been hit by lightning and we are losing altitude. Mayday! Mayday!
CO-PILOT:
Captain, looks like the radio is fried.
PILOT (burst):
God damn it!
Panel 2. View from inside the pilot’s cabin. The pilot is looking back towards the door to the cabin, which is open. In the darkness a couple of figures are visible strapped in for the turbulence.
PILOT (burst):
Get into the cab and tell everyone to get on their life preserves and release the damned oxygen masks, this brick’s going down.
Panel 3. View from the door looking at the two stewardesses, both buckled in and trying to get themselves unstrapped. They are looking at each other with fear in their eyes.
STEWARDESSES:
Yes Captain!
Panel 4. The stewardesses walking into the main cabin of the plane, view from around ten rows back looking forward towards them. Everyone still looks frantic, but their mouths are closed. Many have their eyes clenched shut. Stewardesses on either side of the plane start unbuckling themselves. Of the two who are already standing, 1 is addressing the crowd and 2 is reaching into a compartment by the door.
STEWARDESS 1 (burst):
Ladies and gentlemen, the captain is working to get us leveled out, but we were asked to please have you put on your oxygen masks and reach under your seats for flotation devices.
PAGE FIVE (Three Panels)
Panel 1. Door above one passenger opens up and three air masks drop down, lines for the air lost in the darkness. Dozens of tubes intertwined are visible.
Panel 2. View of the left engine from a close by window, exploding violently.
SFX:
BOOM!
Panel 3. Same POV, but the engine, the wing and the section by them flying out into the night in a shower of rain, air, fire, glass, and people.
PAGE SIX (Five Panels)
Panel 1. View from outside where the wing was looking into the plane, the plane at a 45-degree angle forward to back and left to right. A lot of empty seats are in the middle of the plane and all of the seats close to the explosion are gone, blackened areas in their wake. People either have on their oxygen masks or are frantically trying to fasten them on themselves or their children. A couple more people, including a stewardess are flying out of the plane due to the angle. A crack has appeared on the top of the plane where the wing and section came off.
Panel 2. Same view, but the crack has gotten worse. People are looking up around them who can see it and a few are trying to get themselves out from their seats to move out of the way.
Panel 3. Same view, but the crack is larger. A few people have successfully started climbing towards the front and back of the plane. A few more people fly out of the plane, though.
Pane 4. Same view, but the front of the plane take a steeper dip while the back retains the same angle, now only attached at the seat level. Some people, screaming, whoosh out all around.
Panel 5. View from well behind the plane looking forward towards it. An island is ahead in the distance, a large mountain visible on the right, and a fishing village of some sort visible at the foot of the mountain, also on the right side of the island. The angle of the plane is pointing towards the left side of the island.
NOTE: DO NOT USE WITHOUT PERMISSION
THE LIVING DEAD: DEAD ON ARRIVAL
BY: ERIK HENDRIX
thelastbard@yahoo.com
http://thelastbardsblog.blogspot.com
http://lastbard.deviantart.com
PAGE ONE (Two Panels)
Panel 1. A 747 flying though thick clouds, heavy rain, and lightning all around (some way too close to the plane). Angled image to give the impression that the plane is not flying perfectly straight (turbulence). Plane labeled with fake airline logos for Northern Airlines - Pacific Connection, flight 842.
Panel 2. View from a seat in coach looking up at the little air dial, the no smoking light and the fasten your seatbelts light which has just lit up. The square compartment for the air masks is closed in the center.
SFX:
DING!
RADIO (Stewardess):
Our captain has just requested for everyone to please return to your seats and please fasten your seatbelts. We are experiencing a little bit of turbulence.
PAGE TWO (Five Panels)
Panel 1. Same POV, but Dr. Evans’ right hand is messing with the air, frantically trying to get more air out of the already maxed out vent. Motion in the shot from the plane shaking in the storm.
Panel 2. View Dr. Evans from the seat in front of him. He is looking forwards, sweat on his brow as his right hand arcs awkwardly down, feeling sick due to the motion of the plane. His left hand is clenched tight on his briefcase against his chest. He is crammed between an exceptionally fat man (Roy - his left) and woman (Wanda - his right), barely enough room to gesture, let alone reach for an air vent. The man to his left appears to be sleeping and the woman to his right has her hand on the slide to open the little window cover so she can see outside.
Panel 3. Nervously, Dr. Evans positions the briefcase onto his lap flat and clicks open the locks.
SFX:
Click! Click!
Panel 3. View from the aisle looking in towards Dr. Evans’. His head is cocked slightly to the side and he tries to contort to looks into the barely open briefcase without letting anyone else see what is inside. Barely visible is an orange bag with a biohazard symbol on it and, written in sharpie, “tissue samples 08-13-2005”. Slivers of duct tape hold the visible corners of the bag to the inside of the brief case.
Dr. Evans:
Ahhh…
Panel 4. Same POV, but Dr. Evans’ head is back up and he’s looking around with a look of relief on his face. The fat woman to his right has opened the window and is looking out into the storm, raindrops buffeting the window. It’s dark outside and her head is cocked in that direction. A flash of lightning is visible in the distance. The plane continues to rumble with turbulence.
WANDA:
Roy, check this out!
ROY:
Wha?
WANDA:
Lean your fat head and look out!
Panel 5. View from outside in the rain looking into the window, the window taking up most of the frame. Other windows are visible, but all are closed. Dr. Evans has leaned a little back in his chair so Roy can lean towards the window without getting overly friendly. Beyond Roy, we can see the middle and opposite side of the plane where most people are looking forward, concerned looks on their faces because of the turbulence. On the far side, Alan is visible, head back, eyes closed, and a relaxed look on his face ~ all in a day’s work. He is wearing a sports coat over a red button up shirt and khakis.
PAGE THREE (Five Panels)
Panel 1. Camera pans back into the plane, closing in on Alan, still looking relaxed. The motion from the plane’s turbulence intensifies.
Panel 2. View from outside the plane again, view from beyond the back of the plane looking forward at a slight angle. A thick bolt of lightning hits the top of the plane about a third of the way back, the arc of the bolt is visible on top, arcing to the left engine, and continuing on into the depths below the plane.
SFX:
CRACK!
Panel 3.
Same view as before looking at Alan, but his eyes snap open suddenly.
Panel 4. From his POV looking at the passengers. Everyone is looking around frantically, some looking like they just woke up. Dr. Evans is visible on the other side of the plane, briefcase clenched tightly again to his chest.
RANDOM PERSON 1:
What was that?
RANDOM PERSON 2:
Did you hear that?
RANDOM PERSON 3:
What the fuck?
RANDOM PERSON 4:
Huh?
RANDOM PERSON 5 (burst):
Stewardess!
RANDOM PERSON 6:
Have you ever felt turbulence this severe?
Panel 5. Same POV, but the lights go out and only the light coming in from the bolts of lightning outside cast any light in the cab.
RANDOM PERSON 1 (burst):
SHIT?
RANDOM PERSON 2 (burst):
FUCK!
RANDOM PERSON 3:
Neil?
RANDOM PERSON 4:
Stewardess?
RANDOM PERSON 5:
OHSHITOHSHITOHSHIT!!!
RANDOM PERSON 6:
Mommy?
PAGE FOUR (Four Panels)
Panel 1. View from the nose of the plane looking back at the left engine which is on fire and sputtering, not sure if it wants to stall out or explode. Figures of the pilot and co-pilot are partially visible in the front windows, but it’s dark in there.
PILOT:
Mayday! Mayday! This is Northern Airlines flight 842 en route to Los Angeles, engine has been hit by lightning and we are losing altitude. Mayday! Mayday!
CO-PILOT:
Captain, looks like the radio is fried.
PILOT (burst):
God damn it!
Panel 2. View from inside the pilot’s cabin. The pilot is looking back towards the door to the cabin, which is open. In the darkness a couple of figures are visible strapped in for the turbulence.
PILOT (burst):
Get into the cab and tell everyone to get on their life preserves and release the damned oxygen masks, this brick’s going down.
Panel 3. View from the door looking at the two stewardesses, both buckled in and trying to get themselves unstrapped. They are looking at each other with fear in their eyes.
STEWARDESSES:
Yes Captain!
Panel 4. The stewardesses walking into the main cabin of the plane, view from around ten rows back looking forward towards them. Everyone still looks frantic, but their mouths are closed. Many have their eyes clenched shut. Stewardesses on either side of the plane start unbuckling themselves. Of the two who are already standing, 1 is addressing the crowd and 2 is reaching into a compartment by the door.
STEWARDESS 1 (burst):
Ladies and gentlemen, the captain is working to get us leveled out, but we were asked to please have you put on your oxygen masks and reach under your seats for flotation devices.
PAGE FIVE (Three Panels)
Panel 1. Door above one passenger opens up and three air masks drop down, lines for the air lost in the darkness. Dozens of tubes intertwined are visible.
Panel 2. View of the left engine from a close by window, exploding violently.
SFX:
BOOM!
Panel 3. Same POV, but the engine, the wing and the section by them flying out into the night in a shower of rain, air, fire, glass, and people.
PAGE SIX (Five Panels)
Panel 1. View from outside where the wing was looking into the plane, the plane at a 45-degree angle forward to back and left to right. A lot of empty seats are in the middle of the plane and all of the seats close to the explosion are gone, blackened areas in their wake. People either have on their oxygen masks or are frantically trying to fasten them on themselves or their children. A couple more people, including a stewardess are flying out of the plane due to the angle. A crack has appeared on the top of the plane where the wing and section came off.
Panel 2. Same view, but the crack has gotten worse. People are looking up around them who can see it and a few are trying to get themselves out from their seats to move out of the way.
Panel 3. Same view, but the crack is larger. A few people have successfully started climbing towards the front and back of the plane. A few more people fly out of the plane, though.
Pane 4. Same view, but the front of the plane take a steeper dip while the back retains the same angle, now only attached at the seat level. Some people, screaming, whoosh out all around.
Panel 5. View from well behind the plane looking forward towards it. An island is ahead in the distance, a large mountain visible on the right, and a fishing village of some sort visible at the foot of the mountain, also on the right side of the island. The angle of the plane is pointing towards the left side of the island.