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AbeSapien99
09-23-2008, 10:56 PM
Chapter 2, excerpt:

Hellboy could hear footsteps echoing from somewhere down the hangar; a stack of boxes hid the culprit from his view. He didn’t need to see it, though – he knew it was that man he had seen for that split second. That old man. And even from the sounds of his foot-falls he could tell the stranger wasn’t going all that fast. No geezer was going to outrun him. HB charged after and Abe followed, though now with a little more distance between them; he knew not to stay too close to Hellboy if it came to a fight, plus it just allowed for better cover-fire.

It was nothing to catch up to the old man. HB could run faster than most people even on a slow day and today definitely wasn’t a slow day. He dashed around the stack between him and his target, saw him hobbling towards the huge door, which thankfully was closed right now, at the end of the hangar, and pushed himself even faster. As he neared the man, dressed in a soiled lab coat and sporting a pair of broken glasses, he slowed and reached out to grab his arm.

The geezer stopped and spun, drove a withered old fist into Hellboy’s chest. The blow was surprisingly strong and the impact sent him flying backwards. He soared a good two or three meters through the air, hit the floor, and rolled into some barrels – which of course fell on top of him. Fortunately they were fairly light and just bounced off, hardly even hurting. His chest certainly hurt, though. He reached a hand up to rub the spot where he had been hit. How could such an old withered corpse like that punch so hard?

Abe caught up and passed him, sparing only a quick glance before he rushed towards the old man. HB tried to sit up, to warn him off, but the ache in his chest was still lingering. He winced and fell back to the floor while his partner closed in.

“Stop!” Abe shouted, holding his gun directly at the geezer’s back. “Don’t move or I shoot!”

The man reached the closed hangar door and had to stop anyways. He banged both fists on the metal in a futile attempt to break through, though he did create two slight craters in its surface. Even with whatever superhuman strength he did possess it didn’t seem enough for him to smash through the door. He turned slowly to face Abe.

The amphibious man held his ground. “Stop right there. Last warning.” He tightened the grip on his gun.

The geezer was either insane or just stupid, or perhaps a little of both. He glared at his would-be captor and started to slowly advance. Abe didn’t hesitate, fired a single round into his shoulder. The man’s body shifted with the hit and blood sprayed from the exit wound but otherwise he seemed unaffected. Abe shot again, this time in the gut, and still no response. He started to back away and emptied his entire clip, yet still the man kept walking.

Blood pouring from seven different bullet holes, the man started to laugh. He stopped a few feet from Abe and began to inspect the wounds, laughing all the while. His grinning face turned to stare directly at his opponent. “Forty-nine of your human years,” he croaked. “Forty-nine years have I lived in this decaying shell on this pathetic rock.” His stomach convulsed and he made to vomit, but instead spit out a glob of blood. “You think your projectile weapons will stop me now?”

Abe frowned, or as closely as he could with his facial musculature, and reached for another clip of ammo. He kept his eyes on the old man – or whatever it was now – and kept up his slow retreat. The possessed man grinned at him again, blood and spit and bile covering his lips and mouth, and continued to advance towards him again.

His focus was misplaced, though. Abe Sapien was only half of the threat to him, if he could even be called half. Hellboy had gone unnoticed – something that normally never occurred anywhere – and had managed to sneak around and to the side of the man. He carried one of the steel barrels with him and brought it down on the back of his head and neck. The geezer crumpled forward to the ground, Abe barely getting out of his way in time.

Hellboy dropped the barrel and stepped over him, looked down. He wasn’t moving at all, not even breathing. “I’d say he’s down for the count.”

“Red, you’ve been at this for, what, fifty-five years now?” Abe asked. “How many things that you have beaten in that time have actually stayed down?”

HB actually seemed to count in his head. “Well, there was that Satyr thing in ’83, and the…”

He trailed off, noticing the skin of the fallen old man had started to shift and bubble. Something or somethings were moving under the flesh, like cockroaches under a carpet. Hellboy leaned in for a closer inspection, then backed up as the body started to expand. The geezer’s skin was swelling rapidly all over, his torso expanding the most. There was definitely something still alive in there… and it wanted out.

“Ah crap,” HB muttered.



Continue reading here. Be sure to check for updates as more chapters are finished. (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4559994/1/Between_Heaven_and_Hell)

AbeSapien99
09-23-2008, 10:57 PM
Had to make this into a reply since I couldn't squeeze it all into the main post...

First of all, sorry for the formatting. Unfortunately this forum doesn't use a Rich-text format, so mere copy-and-pasting doesn't really work. I tried my best to make it look less scary, so hopefully it worked.

Secondly... it's great to be here. :) I just joined the forums and have been browsing around the past bit. I admit I came here mostly to share my work and see some true Hellboy fan's opinions, but now that I've been here I see some interesting stuff.

Now back to my story. I don't really like the term "fan fiction" because various terrible, terrible 'fan-fics' by totally amateur writers that I've come across over the years have tainted it (most notably a few Lord of the Rings fan pieces.... the horror). Anyways, it is fiction written by a fan so I shall call it as such.

I originally wrote this prologue almost two years ago, as well as the short chapter after it, and only recently have I had enough free time to continue my hobby (which is writing in general, but I really liked where I was going with this particular piece so I've fallen into it again). I won't reveal any more of the plot in case people are genuinely interested, and am definitely willing to share more of it as it comes along. So far I've written about four chapters (one of which is rather long), totalling about 50 pages... and I still have a lot more I'd like to get done. I basically have the whole story in my head, it'll just take some time to get written down.

Anyways, I'd really like to know what you guys think. I'll tell you now to not waste the effort if you're only going to flame... I've learned over the years to simply ignore people like that. Comments and constructive criticism are very welcome. :)

And if you want more, just ask and I shall post. I'll have to try and upload them in separate files, though.

jnapper
09-25-2008, 06:01 AM
Will read this over the weekend, cool!

siamese goat
09-25-2008, 06:14 AM
Welcome to the board and thanks!
I found it to be a very good read. You did a good job of keeping my interest with out giving too much too soon, great pacing. I also loved the idea of not mentioning any of the main characters, the focus on the truck driver was cool.
I would definitely read more if posted.

AbeSapien99
09-25-2008, 10:15 AM
Thanks. :)

I was kind of distraught to see no one had replied but there was about 30-some views of it... then I realized, well, I'm not really giving you readers what you want: Hellboy. So, without further ado, chapters 1 and 2 can be found at FanFiction.net (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4559994/1/Between_Heaven_and_Hell). ;) Chapter 1 develops the story more (sorta important later), but it's chapter 2 that brings in your favourite red-skinned, monster-bashing hero. I kinda got carried away with that one... Hence why it's 30 pages and dwarfs the other chapters so far. :\

Also, I stumbled across another fan-written short story on FanFiction.net called "Somewhere Between Heaven and Hell." That was pretty annoying, because I was liking my title. Anyways, I realize you don't know the whole story, and I don't want to give any more of the plot away, but if anyone can think of a cool sounding title that's similar to that (keeping with the Heaven and Hell idea), I'm open to suggestions. I spent a good hour thinking of a new title yesterday, but none seemed more suiting than 'Between Heaven and Hell' (at least for a Hellboy story). So I might just leave it, it's not exactly the same anyways, but I'd like to hear suggestions if anyone has any.

hellhound777
09-29-2008, 10:57 PM
Prologue looks great. its rare to find good fan works in general, let alone Hellboy (no one ever reads the comic books. at least where i looked). will definitely read chapters 1 and 2.

hellhound777
09-29-2008, 11:34 PM
Ive just read chapter 1 and i must say i like it. it definitely isn't amateur like so many other fics Ive read. i will wait while to read chapter 2 (30 pages in Microsoft word isn't exactly comfortable) but i will definitely read it. keep up the good work.

AbeSapien99
09-30-2008, 09:47 AM
Awesome, thanks for reading as much as you have so far. :smile:

Yeah, I've made a few fan-fics before, none that I ever actually finished. Those ones were planned as novels, too: the furthest I got was about 210 pages on a Star Wars one, but that was about 4 years ago and I'm sure the writing is really amateur. It definitely did give me good practice, though.

Anyways yeah, I just came up with a general plot for this story, thinking... well, I don't want to ruin it for you. :wink: But basically it was spurred by the thought "What if Hellboy encountered ________________ and had to fight it? How would it turn out...?" The blank, of course, was filled-in in my head (and still is). Then from that first idea, the story just developed itself. I'm sure that's how most auithors come up with ideas; I go through the same process myself even for original pieces, but my Hellboy story developed almost eerily fast. Then I just fine tuned some things, made sure it would fit in the Hellboy mythos (even just yesterday I discovered the year it's set in - 2000 - is no good, because Liz had left for the monastery in February of that year), and am slowly getting it written down.

Here, I posted it on FanFiction.net (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4559994/1/Between_Heaven_and_Hell), and that site is a little friendlier than Freewebs (at least for putting up new chapters and such). Maybe it's a little easier to read. I'll be updating it there instead of my Freeweb page, though, so after Chapter 2 you'll need to continue on FanFiction.net (once I get more chapters up :wink:).

AbeSapien99
10-01-2008, 03:52 PM
Hate to double-post, but in case anyone's curious, I added Chapters 3 and 4. :)

Kees_L
10-03-2008, 03:44 PM
Consider me curious for all of it, Abe99. I skimmed through the prologue yesterday and it struck me as well-written.
However I'm much of a difficult reader, like if I'm not totally captivated I hardly seem to finish reading a text.
I haven't even finished any of the Hellboy novels yet (and I only started in one or two - no: just one...), although I did read most of the 'Oddy Jobs'. The short in those are less of a scare and more easily digested I guess. Baltimore took me little effort and gratified instantly and lastingly. The other Mignola covered or illustrated books I'm as yet only prowling around.
I like writers to be readable yet at the same time they have to go out of their way, even out of bounds, to get points and stuff across. Like Fight Club, like Trainspotting, like Haruki.
I like how you're envisaging. That's good. Of course, wordyness is hard when writing a Hellboy. Since he himself seems so much about being not too wordy. I hope you know what I mean. (For a synonym to wordy I like long-winded- as if to say fart-ificiously...:biggrin:). In your prologue I haven't stumbled on any such controversy, I will however keep you posted, if you would bear with me :wink:.

jnapper
10-03-2008, 04:31 PM
AbeSapien99, things have been hectic and I spaced on this-- hopefully, this weekend will be better :)

AbeSapien99
10-04-2008, 02:04 PM
No problemo, jnapper. I read your blurb on the main page and totally understand. Whenever you get to it, that's fine. I don't care when people read it, I just care if they do read it. :smile:

Kees_L: I see what you're saying. There are a lot of books out there - some of the Hellboy ones included - where I've had a tough time getting through them because they didn't fully captivate me, but I managed to finish purely because of the subject (as in, I've read all the Hellboy ones just because they're about Hellboy). Anyways, yeah I admit I have nothing unique or very special about this story, but I have limited control over Hellboy and his world - they're Mike's creations, I'm simply 'borrowing' them. :wink: So I can't do much other than simply tell a story. As I said, though, I understand what you mean, so don't feel bad... but I think you should keep reading anyways. :tongue: