Adiagon (Computer Graphic Story)

[aven]

Alright, my Interactive CGS site is up so if you guys dont mind of critiquing it, give some feed back
that would be great :lol:

A INTERACTIVE CGS IS A NEW WAY TO SEE COMICS ONLINE ALSO IT'S
DOWNLOADABLE:smile:

you'll need flash to view it and don't use the back button there is a home button in the bottom right hand corner of the scroll it's a symbol that will take you
back to the homepage. you'll know what i mean when you see it

http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/2015/adeb8.jpg

Visit My Website (www.adiagon.com)

this is my very own home made site, that still need tweeking in some places but if there's spots i've miss please tell me
IF YOU GUYS ARE CONFUSE WHAT THE SITE IS ALL ABOUT GO TO THE SYMBOL THAT TELL'S WHAT A INTERACTIVE CGS IS

THIS SITE IS FOR MY TITLE "ADIAGON" CHECK OUT THE STORY, TELL ME WHAT YA THINK :D

[LewMoxinsghost]

Nice! I have really enjoyed looking at your site. Here is my take on it:

Likes:
- The innovation of it. CGS as an idea is great fun! Check this out: Scott McCloud (http://www.scottmccloud.com/comics/comics.html)
- The artwork, color scheme, general design is clearly very professionally done for the most part
- The idea, while not mind blowingly original, is compelling enough to get behind as either a reader or a contributing artist or writer.
- Download time is very manageble- the pages load relatively quickly which is really nice. Not behind an at-work filter! Wooo!
- Incorporated sound effects and music has tremendous potential, both in enhancing the book and in generating revenue for more CGSs. If this becomes more popular, bands and other companies could pay for the advertisement of being included. The catch is they have to want exposure and not be a big band or company that wants you to pay them for this. If that is the case then you can use them to promote your stuff. Anyway, huge potential there IMO.
- Reminds me of my own conversion to digital. The nostalgia is a nice feeling.

Dislikes:
-The demo is stated as being available in one place, but in another it says "coming soon"
-Some of the animation is a little disjointed or overly simplisitic, resulting in an inconsistent style.
-Scale could be be bigger, but this might affect download speed. Go check out Zuda's (http://www.zuda.com) format.
- A few grammatical errors, nothing big, but I couldn't help but feel more could be done with the story itself.
-Can't copy the text from your email address to write you and tell you what an awesome idea this is. Maybe you should put up an Outlook link for us more conventional folks? Also, the "mystery meat" navigation on the symbol buttons isn't really desirable for me personally, though there is a certain charm there.
-If it is free for PG13, why does the MA version cost money? What is the incentive to buy? Boobies?:biggrin: I think there are better ways of covering the costs of it. Maybe not... this is a debate that has been raging forever.

Overall: I would say what you have here is a really good idea that deserves more support and development. The heartbreaker for you may be that I am referring to the format more than the story or characters. (but then I have not really been into this genre much) Some ways you can improve it in my opinion is to recruit more writers and artists to contribute to the development of the idea, and improve the navigation and few grammer mistakes. Just put a simple always-there label on the buttons and no mouse-over speech bubbles for us new to the site. Remember, it is easy to repel newbies, but hard to attract them. Mystery meat navigation always makes me want to leave. But the fact that I felt compelled to write this critique should assure you that you are definitely onto something good here. Just include a few conventional navigation stuff, recruit some more talent, and, if you were willing to disclose some of your process and technique, I could see this thing really taking off. Really awesome work, my friend!

[aven]

thanks for the great reply, and for the most part i agree on your dislike's about my site.

that site for the most part is a beta site meaning a rough draft before the really one. i just wanted you guys see and observe and hopfully tell me what i had to fisk and improve which your reply did and thanks again:smile:

about the demo, it is available but i'm pretty new to action script(flash) and websites. i learn pretty much everything on how to make a website but to make a downloadable link where you guys can download it to your computer is frustrating task. i half to ask a professional for that.

about the grammer errors, i'm not much of a writer i'm more of a story board artist i can tell a story with pictures and that is the great thing about this CGS it's
more pictures less words and of course the Dialogue(which i can do)

about the PG 13 and MA, couple things about that. when i say it's rated MA, it's not porn and the story doesn't revolve around that but it is not for kids either.
about the paying for it, well it keeps under age kids from watching it cause they will need credit card to see it and that's why it's only $2.50(COMIC BOOK PRICE)
also if i do make some cash, it's all going towards my CGS to make it look better and more professional(there is other programs out there that can help greatly) also it can go towards my site too(ISP/HOSTING SITE)

about the simple animation, well i wanted to show a short but sweet animation that can give a general idea about the different animations(i hope it worked)

the full version of my cgs is going to be FULL COLORED, REAL SOUND FX, FILLED WITH ORIGINAL SONGS FROM ORIGINAL BANDS, AND SHOW THE ANIMATIONS:biggrin:

Last thing i will be giving the process of how to make a CGS in youtube format so you guys can see how to do it yourself(in the near future):smile:

[aven]

ok guys this demo is kinda big where you half to scroll up and down to see what there saying. Sorry about that:redface: ,
it was my first time creating a C.G.S. it was meant to be downloaded but i'm having trouble with that issue.just wanted you guys see it and not wait.:biggrin:
so just click on the demo symbol
http://img262.imageshack.us/img262/8244/adiagonposterboardkm3.jpg

tell me what ya'll think and tell me if you guys have any issues on playing it.

YOU'LL NEED FLASH TO SEE IT.
www.adiagon.com (http://www.adiagon.com)