What do you guys think of this?...and this...and this...

[quddusaliquddus]

Hi all :) ,
Im trying to write up my first comic. I have some ideas and I would like to share them with you. I'll be continually adding new ideas as they come to me. I know its not much at the moment but hopefully given time - it might turn out to be something good.

You are asked to critique my ideas and suggest new ones if you you would be so kind as to.

Here it goes:

This is set in the future when science and technology reigns supreme. In the last pockets of traditional civilisations there remain people who still believe in magic. This is changing as education is creating a new generation of non-superstitious people.

The hero of the story (whose name i havent been able to think up yet - so we'll call him 'H') - H - lives in the city. His parents live in the countryside in a village. They believe in magic but H is an ardent believer in science.

Then one day a mysterious stranger 'spiritualises' him giving him strange powers (any suggestions?) e.g. the ability to fly.

[I cant seem to know what goes here. Any suggestions?]

He then embarks on a quest [Why? Any suggestions?] for an object.

This is all I've come up. I know its not much. Any help is appreciated.

Thanks!! :D

Q

PS
Its a cross between sci-fi and fantasy.

BTW
H's gains faith in magic when he finds he has all these powers.

[quddusaliquddus]

And also - i thought of this: There are a couple of aliens that look like human beings on earth. They are here to colonise the earth. They know advanced magic and science. They've been encouoraging science to become dominant on earth so that no magicians are left so that they can take it over using magic as magic is more powerful than science or technology.

[quddusaliquddus]

No comments? Is it that bad?

[Kara Zor El]

If you are going to be a writer you need to come up with a lot more than this. What's the point in asking others to fill in so many gaps. I suggest you spend sometime thinking it all through and take the time to write a treatment and post it without gaps and then get some feedback.

[quddusaliquddus]

thanks for being straight with me. i will take your advice.

[BizarroBeachHead]

It looks to me that what you have here is a bunch of ideas for different scenes than for a complete story.

The best way to fill in those gaps is to take a hard look at what and why you want to write.

Form the looks of it, you got good groundwork laid for a science vs. religion story.

Where do you stand on the subject of science vs. religion? What do you think you can say about it? How does your character relate to it?

Those are all rhetorical questions, but once you answer them, you should be closer to filling in those gaps with events that push forward your ideas and themes rather than happening just for the sake of action or plot twist.

Best of luck.

[quddusaliquddus]

Thanks BizarroBeachHead :)

[Winslow]

It's a nice concept and has some potential.

But a story needs a beginning, a middle, and an end, as well as a conflict to resolve.

You need those basics.

[quddusaliquddus]

OK winslow ... I will work on the beginning middle and end as well as a conflict.