Masine ( Working title )

[Masine]

Hi all , this is my first time posting any of my work on this site any feed back would be welcomed . I know my panel discriptions are not up to snuff , but i will work on that . This is where i will post all the first drafts of each "chapter" of a Graphic novel i am writing ( still in search of a artist but arent we all ) . The basic premise is there is a new Drug going around the world that gives a amazing high , but as more and more people use it , the users find that it gives them "powers" but only for a short time. The first part of the graphic novel will be about the discovery by the users and the world of what this new drug does , the second part will be how the world reacts to it. This will lead to a second novel where it good become a monthly but i want to get through this first one wich would set everything up for the sequal and monthly. Hope you enjoy

[Masine]

CHAPTER 1 Corn on the cob?

Panel ( A large overview pic of nothing but farm land )

< Clay county Indiana , Friday 10 PM >

Panel ( large overview now goes onto focusing on a farm house )

Panel ( 3 mid teen friends sit in a basement , 1 girl 2 boys, 1"John" boy is tying off his arm to inject himself with a needle )

Pete: You sure you wanna do that ?

John: Shut up Petey , The guy said this shit Is the newest and best

Panel ( John injects himslef with the Needle , Joy the girl looks away)

Pete: Man why do you gotta get high every friday

Panel ( John , laying down eyes glazed over , Really thrashed already )

John: you see anything else to do around here other then Joy?

Panel ( Pete standing up and grabing joys hand to leave )

Pete: Forget you John

Panel ( John stands up pissed and gets in front of pete blocking his way out )

John: What i hurt petey's Feelings by calling his girl a slut or is it because your a pussy?

Joy: Get out of the way john , we are tired of getting high every week , and now look at you Sticking god knows what into your arm

Panel ( John turns to Joy still blocking their way out )

John: Shut up like Petey ever gets high anyway , he's Just a Pussy! dont you want a real man

Joy: Thats enough John!

Panel ( John Hits Joy , knocking her to the ground )

John: Bitch!

Panel ( Pete shaking pulls out a Knife from his pocket and points it at John )

Pete: Let us out !

John: Aww look the little boy is trying to be a man what are you gonna do stab me? Ha! your just a ...

Panel ( John getting in Pete's face , Pete stabs John )

John: Pusssss.. Argh......

Panel ( John stands there in Shock , looking at Pete, Joy looking up at Pete )

Joy: Pete what did you just do ?

Pete: I...I .......

Panel ( John Pulls the knife out of his chest , the wound starts to heal everyone stares at the healing wound )

John: Ungh!

Joy: Omy god Pete look

Panel ( Johns Face turns to anger , he leaps at Pete , but misses hitting the ground )

Pete: Lets GO!

Panel ( Joy and Pete run out of the room )

Panel ( John standing up , with a anger and glazed look over his eyes )

John: Get Back here Pussy!

Panel ( of john Running after them )

< 45 mins later >

Panel ( Pete and Joy in a corn field , looking tired , panting and so forth )

Pete: I think... we lost him , you ok?

Joy: Yeah I'm Ungh.....

Panel ( a fist is run through Joys chest )

John: No your not Sweatheart

Panel ( Joy drops to the ground dead , John stands over her staring at Pete With a evil smile on His face )

John: How you Doin Petey?

Pete: What have you done ? What are you .....

Panel ( John moves closer to Pete , the glaze over in his eyes is vanishing )

John: Seems That new Drug i used did something to me.... gave me powers , I am a god now and your still just a little boy

Panel ( Pete pulls out another Knife , John starts to smile , The glazed over look is now completly out of his eyes )

John: Ha ! Your Gonna stab me again! that didnt work last time

Pete: Back off you freak!

Panel ( Pete stabs John in the chest again )

John: Fucking .... UNGH! ....

Panel ( John drops down to the ground , Blood pooring from his wound looking up at Pete )

John: But.... I ..I am ..... help me Pete.....i'm...

Panel ( Pete runs away further into the corn field )

Panel ( Panning away from the corn field )

John: ...Dying

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CHAPTER 2 REDEMPTION

panel:( A dark rainy night in a city slum, a slender pale woman in mid 20's pulling a young boy about age 5 down the sidewalk)

Timothy : Mommy where are we going? .... it's rainy .... I'm cold ..... STOP PULLING ! I WANNA GO HOME !
Leila : DAMMIT TIMOTHY SHUT UP! mommy needs to meet a few friends
Timothy : BUT MOMMY I"M HUNGRY!
panel: ( Leila turns around and back hands timothy )
panel: ( Tears swell in Timothy's eyes as he stares at Leila , who drops to her knees and hold timothy close. )
Leila: ( shaking & crying ) OO baby mommies sorry... Mommies just a little clutter brained without her fix. You know I love you right?
Timothy: yyyess
panel: ( Leila and timothy turn down a dark alley where two men are waiting one a tall skinny white guy and the other a very muscular black guy )
Terence: about time Leila
Max: Yeah we were just about to close up shop , so your usual fix my dear? thats 60 bucks chica
Leila: WHAT! Last week it was only 25
panel: ( Terence and max start to walk away )
Terence: Inflation , aint it a shame , words hit town that our shits the best.
Max: Yeah supply and demand and all that stuff so pay up or no fix
panel: ( Leila walks up to Terrace putting her lips right against his ear and her hand on his crotch )
Leila: I'll give you the money I have and how about I work off the rest?
Terence: Keep your legs closed for once slut
Max: No money NO FIX!
panel: ( Leila falls to her knees in front of Terence crying , her right hand falls into his pocket unnoticed )
Leila: Please.... I need it ..... I’ll do anything.... just ..... please
panel: ( she grabs the drugs from terraces pocket and starts to run )
Leila: RUN TIMMY!
Terence: BITCH!.... MAX GET HER!
Max: SHIT!
panel: ( on the roof top above the alley rain drops splash off of a invisible figure giving a vague outline , )
panel: ( Leila trips and falls , timothy is frozen in fear up against a wall. Terrace stands over Leila gun pointed straight at her )
Max: CAP THAT BITCH! and lets get out
Terence: I got a better Idea.....
panel: ( Terence turns his gun towards timothy )
Leila: NO! PLEAS NO!
Terence: You take my drugs from me , I take the only thing you truly have
Timothy: Mommy I’m scared
panel: ( another panel of the invisible figure being outlined by the falling rain , the figure throws a throwing knife )
Terence: say bye bye Timmy
panel: ( the throwing knife knocks the gun out of Terence hand )
Terence: WHAT THE HELL!
Max: HUH? what was that?
Panel: ( our invisible figure does a front flip from the roof to the alley below , slowly turning visible , eyes are glazed over )
* costume is black with red accents , wearing a mask *
Max: Ummm.... ummm T?
Terence: Don’t just freakin stand there shoot'um!
panel: ( Terence grabs his gun from the ground and both him a n max shoot the dark figure several times knocking him back onto the ground )
Max: YEAH GOTEM!
Terence: Dam freak , wounder what the hell he was on? , O well now where was I? ..... O yeah...
panel: ( Tarrebce once again turns his gun towards timothy )
Terence: This time you die shrimp
Leila: NO!
panel: ( Terence shoots , but Leila jumps in front of it taking the bullet and falling to the ground dead )
Timothy: MOMMY!
panel: ( timothy runs to his mothers body )
Max: HUH?
panel: ( The dark figure stands up his bullet wounds start to close before max's eyes )
Max: NO.....no... I shot you man..... your dead.... I fucking shot you!
( The figure slits max's throat and throws a knife into Terence knee knocking him to the ground )
Terence: sssshit man.... who the hell are you?
panel: ( the figure walks silently over to Terence , till he's right above him )
Terence: WWWhat are you.... SPEAK DAMMIT!......why?....that bitch deserved to die , she was a no good crack whore, she was nothing!......and deserved .....NOTHING!
Redemption: wrong she deserved redemption
panel: ( redemption throws a knife into Terence throat killing him , redemption takes a wade of cash out of terraces pocket )
panel: ( timothy crying over his moms lifeless bloody body , redemption walks over and throws the wade of cash down by timothy )
Timothy: Mommies not getting up.... please help her.....PLEASE HELP MY MOMMY!
panel: ( Timothy looks up with tears running down his face , he and redemption stare into each others eyes in silence )
panel: ( redemption leaps to the top of the building )
the fallowing are all panels
1) a panel of max lying dead
2) a panel of redemption looking down on the scene he has just left
3) a panel of Terence laying dead
4) a panel of redemption turning invisible
5) a panel of timothy crying over his dead mother
6) a panel of redemption running from roof top to roof top
7) a panel of the police pulling timothy away from his mothers body
8) a BOLT OF LIGHTNING
9) redemption sticking himslef with a needle , his eyes glaze over
10) Bolt of lightning
11) a panel of redemption looking down at a window and a silouhte of a pregnant woman
10) BOLT OF LIGHTNING