A Tale of two brothers (First story ever, just thought of it)

[Froggy]

*A young man with a powerful physique in egyptian robes is standing over a grave in front of a tree, looking off into the distance, with a woman next to him* "Are you ready to talk about him now Igneel?"

*the man looks at her, and nods* "Yea, im ready now Marla..........I remember the day I finally got fed up losing to him"

"Five years ago, in the same forest, two young men are fighting. One is Igneel, but younger by about five years, much skinnier. the other man is slim, but muscular, with a enormous smile"

"You ready Igneel? You know what will happen if you lose right?" the older man questioned Igneel

"Me lose? No......you should get ready to taste DEFEAT this time Ramus" Igneel remarks after stomping his feet as a sign of his readiness

The elder brother flippantly shrugs and says "Ok........begin!" and charges toward his brother, moving incredibly fast

But Igneel was ready, blocking each kick and punch his brother threw
*KICK* You're *two punches* Getting a LOT better *Kicking* at blocking! See you're finally listening to dad
"You should also see youre about to meet DEFEAT AT MY HANDS BROTHER" POWER PALM STRIKE! *Igneel's palms flame with energy, and launches them at his brother, only to have his brother step to the side*
"Uh uh uhhhhhhhhh, you shouldnt try a Chakra move THIS early in the match! His brother states as he sweepkicks Igneel and then knocks him in the chest with a fist* "down on your ass already little man?....where'd all the tlak go?"

"SHUT UP! Igneel shouted with much rage as he lunged at ramus, arms out, striking wildly. "IM GOING TO WIN!"
*ramus leaps up into a tree* "not with that attitude you are, already lost your temper, now you're just striking wildly, I could so take you out right now"
"THEN WHY DONT YOU?"
"was wondering when you'd ask!" *ramus flips off the tree, bounces off another one, and nails his brother Igneel in the back with a dropkick, knocking his brother through a tree, leaving him motionless*
"Damnit, DAMN DAMN DAMN I LOST AGAIN!" Igneel whined, slamming the ground in anger
"But you ARE getting better. You lasted much longer this time. Now come on mom's probably finished with dinner by now, and dad's probably home from getting my tournament winnings that WE'RE gonna spend! he says as he extends his hand to his little brother
GAH! roars igneel as he smacks his brother's hand away

part one, i just wanted to get this story out of my head, got like two more parts and thats it, tell me what you think so far

[Froggy]

Ramus sighed. "he'll be back" and walked home without his brother

Marla questioned "why were you so angry about losing to him?"

Cause he was the one person I couldn't beat. He was THE best fighter in the land, and I wanted to be the best, so if I beat him, then i'd get that title you see? I always wanted that title for myself but my brother never really cared it seemed like. I never realized he didn't care till now........O yea hwere was I?

"I was walking off into the forest, to let off some steam"

"Thats the 25th time hes beaten me. HOW COME I CANT BEAT HIM! I remember all the moves, ive improved my movements, gotten faster and stronger, and its STILL NOT ENOUGH! GAH WHATS WORNG WITH ME! Igneel shouts in rage as he slams down a tree. Looking at the sun going down igneel notes "maybe I should get home

[Froggy]

On the way home, taking some time to cool off after his latest loss, Igneel wondered to himself "thats five years of losses now. He's beaten me 25 times. HOW DOES HE DO IT? I know he's the best fighter in the land, just like dad was years ago, but the same blood runs through MY veins as well. I should have beat him a while ago. How come I can't? I hate how he tries to give me tips, I can't take his advice, i'll beat him with my own help!". Igneel started to get quiet as he got closer to his home, and noticed his mother and brother talking

"Do you think the results will come back positive mom? I mean this could be heartbreaking news for him"

"For HIM? What about you? What if there ISNT a cure? I thought it ahd stopped"

Igneel walked in and the conversation stopped to a abrupt halt

"O Hi dear, glad to see you made it home safely, your brother was worried about you......get ready for dinner as your father will be home soon"

Ramus leaned over to his brother. "Glad to see you cooled off little man, cause I wanted to talk to you about something......."

*Ramus mother glares at him*

"I want to talk to you about our next match.......when do you want it to be?"

Igneel said "I'll challenge you again in a week, and BEAT YOU!"
Ramus "who knows, maybe you will?"
*The boys father bust in* DADDYS HOME!
*boy sjump up in excitement* YAY!

*later that night, Ramus and his father talk*
"So dad..........you said this disease hits every third generation of our family? THe firstborn? But I thought I was safe, the nurse even said so"
"Well son.the nurse.......she......she was wrong. Im sorry son.......it's going to hit you"
"Wow....so I AM going to die?"
"yep..sorry son...if you want to cry I understand"
"naw im cool dad. If it's my time to go, it's my time to go ya know? Just wish it could have been in combat or something......how long do I have?"
"We dont know. could be by tomorrow or end of this week at most"
"wow...Iggy will be crushed"

[Froggy]

the mother and father of igneel and ramus talk
"So were going to keep it secret from Igneel? WHY?
"The boy would be crushed, ramus himself said so."
"But its better than lying to him that everything would be ok! isnt it dear?
"Yes, my wife, you're right. We dont have much time with our son though, so lets make the best of it"
"You better not use this as an excuse to lie to the boy, saying everything is going to be ok!"
"I wont i wont. now lets go to sleep!
*A week later, Igneel goes into town to find his brother at his girlfriend/soon to be wife house, chilling*
"HEY BROTHER....you know waht day it is?"
"OMG I cant believe I almost forgot......Nia will you excuse me? I have to school Iggy over here again!
"See you later then dear! Nia says as she waves to her soon to be husband *waves bye to Nia and gives Iggy a noogie* you gonna beat me this time?
"O you know it"
"Hah.......so confident *mutters* Im gonna miss that confidence of yours.... "
"What brother?"
"nothing. O wait were at the forest......ready to begin?
"ready as i'll ever be!" Igneel shouts as he gets into his fighting stance, motioning for his brother to attack him
"hah.*mutters* thats my brother* as he comes at Igneel, and they exchange blows. He throws a right at igneel which Iggy blocks, then iggy tries a axe kick which his brother dodges, then flips onto the top of his head, jumps off and kicks him in the back of his head causing Igneel to flip over but then iggy quickly regains his composure and lands on his feet. Igneel then launches himself at the tree behind him and comes at his brother with a assault of aerial kicks, which his brother blocks until he grabs Igneel's right foot, and slams him to the ground."Uggh, that was hard. Ogtta get up. I CANT lose here. I CANT!" Igneel gets up and launches a false kick at his brother, then pulls his leg back and hit shis brother with a power palm strike, knocking his brother back quite a bit. "Hah, that week of training DID pay off!"
"It'll pay off in ME finally beaitng you!"
"heh" is all ramus said before he dashed RIGHT behind his brother, then elbowing him in the back of his head, jumping backwards and catching his brothers flying body with a foot to the head, knocking him upward.
"NOw i can try this new attack on you little man! Ramus says as he jumps up in the air, and his right leg starts to glow"
"THUNDERING AXE KICK"! *BOOM*Is what ramus shouts as he axe kicks his brother with his thundering leg, knocking Igneel into the ground so hard he makes a crater.
*Igneel lies there motionless for a few minutes*
"Gahh.I...I LOST AGAIN! DAMNIT DAMNIT DAMNIT! Iggy notes with his face up out of the ground first. He then notices his brother, gets up, and wlaks over to him. DAMN YOU! BASTARD! I WILL BEAT YOU! SOMEDAY I WILL!. Igneel is shocked when his brother starts to cry. "WHY AREY OU CRYING!? YOU WON! WHAT IS THERE TO CRY ABOUT!?
"Iggy iggy iggy..........y'see, theres not going to BE another match little man......im dying" ramus said in between tears. "Thats what me and mom were talking about a week ago, when you walked in to the house. Its that family disease, passed onto the firstborn of every generation. Thats why im crying, i'll never be able to give you your rematch little man. I already feel the disease starting to take hold of my body. "Look at my hands". Igneel noticed the blood on his brothers hands, and around his mouth. Igneel was shocked........he felt a mix of emotions. "DAMNIT WHY DO YOU HAVE TO DIE!? He shouted between tears. "NOW I'll NEVER GET MY REMATCH! NEVERRRRRR! he said shouting and crying at his brother. The two brothers embrace each other. "Lets go home little man. I dont wanna die out here in the forest.....I want to die in my bed...get Nia if you can BLARGH *throws up blood* sorry" *later at their home, Ramus is on his bed with his family around him* Im sorry I can't give you a rematch little man is all Igneel can think before he dies. His brother stomps otu of the room distraught. "WHY'D YOU HAVE TO DIE!? WHY!!!!!!! Igneel shouted as he hit a tree in half and started to cry afterwards "Im gonna miss youuuuuu......why'd you have to go? why not me? IM THE LOSER here..........gaaaaah
"Uhh Igneel my son, you're not a loser, don't believe that......you're brother never believed you were a loser either"
"He didn't?"
"he didnt. He told me once he admired YOU for your passion, and determination. He knew you'd be great, even if you never DID beat him. I also have a way you could honor him."
"how so father?"
"Keep his name alive.......keep "ramus" as a title, given to the greatest fighter in the land.....which is you my son"
"Really Dad? You mean it?!
"yes...your brother would be proud"
*Flashback ends, fades back to Igneel and Marla, standing near Ramus tombstone, reminiscing*
"So you kept his name alive as a title, by being the strongest fighter alive you kept your brothers name alive and you had his memory live on....I bet your borther IS proud of you Iggy!" Marla says leaning on IGgy's shoulder
"I bet he is too. He was a great guy, too bad I realized that when it was too late" Igneel notes. "I still miss you Ramus, so does mom and dad. Nia is still a widow, waiting till her time comes.....and me, well i've been....we'll you've seen. I've kept your name alive, hope your proud of that"
"hey Iggy LOOK AT THE CLOUDS!" Marla shouted
*iggy looks up at the clouds and notices a familiar smile looking back at him*
"Glad to make you smile"

[Froggy]

"And so it went on, that Igneel Ignatius Jones, or as his mother called him, "her little Iggy" traversed the plains of his planet for the past five years, fighting beings from all areas, upholdilng his title as the strongest and also training for his "perfect match" with Ramus. Soon though his journey will make quite a sharp turn, and he will go from just a fighter, to hero. The latest chapter of our story begins in a small town called martuso"

*show a dirt road in the town of martuso, with a redheaded girl, wrapped in a brown cloak, listening to the men on the street talk*

A big burly man, muscular with gray hair and beard, speaks first. "They say that Ramus been around here, killing fools who challenge him, saying only the strong survive in the world of fighters, and you who aren't strong, DIE. Darn shame for those kids parents, to lose they children like that, darn shame"

Another man, much more wiry, and with just a hat and pants on said "I heard he about ten feet tall, some reckon he a giant, with demonic red eyes and bulging muscles. Heard that a match with him only last longer than a minute cause he twisted like dat! Hope somebody put a stop to him"
*The redhead turns to the two old men talking, while they turn to her*
THe wiry old man asks "WHat ye want, lil girlie?"
"You two men were talking about the Ramus, I suppose you know a lot about him?"
"Ye could saaaaaaay THAAAAT" the man said looking at her chest
"well I.......AHEM! *the man looks at her face again* EYES UP HERE OLD MAN! she shouts. "Anyways I was wondering if you knew where his next location would be?"
"Cant say we do child, sorry"the wiry old man said with a sadface. "Buuuuuut do ye think you could"
"YOU finish that sentence old man and you'll regret it!" she states with a face that says "come on.......mess with me and youll have your head in the ground like an ostrich"
*She tehn walks off, wondering "Come on marla, where will I find this Ramus bastard? I've got to find him and make him pay! Make him pay for OOMPH!". Her sentence was cutoff as she bumped into a man in strange robes and a sheik-type mask in front of her, and was promptly knocked on her butt*
"You should really pay attention when you're walking you know" the stranger says in a dryput fashion
"Haa, thanks for the "advice" maybe YOU should watch where YOU"RE GOING? shouting and putting her finger in his face
"OK WHY ARE YOU GETTING UP IN MY FACE WHEN IT WAS YOU WHO BUMPED INTO ME!"
"How did I bump itno you if you were paying so much attention? MAYBE YOU WEREN'T? THINK ABOUT THAT EH?
"I....I was......SHUT UP!" THe stranger then stated to himself "Igneel, why do you even try, why?" before walking off
The redheaded girl, known as Marla, picked herself up off the ground, before having a lightbulb pop up oover her head. "I Know.......how could I forget that since im a shaman, I can observe someones spirit energy and find out who they are! *She then gets into a stance with her hands in front of her* "Spirit search........The RAMUS................one right behind me? Well of course theres only one, I cant wait till i become a official shaman, then this thing will be more accurate. *she starts to walk then stops* Right behind me? THAT GUY? *she then starts running at him* COME BACK HERE YOU BASTARD!
*Iggy turns around and sees Marla, and wonders what's goign on*

[Froggy]

*marla thought to herself* I always wanted to be a shaman cause of my dad, and waht he could do with the powers a shaman was granted, but I didn't want to become evil like him or this Ramus. AFter seeing my friends killed, I decided to use these powers to avenge them. As a shaman I can call upon certain spirits to help me in combat, so today I call upon thei spirit of AMON! GOD OF THE WIND! *her speed started to get faster and faster as she ran towards Iggy and launched a series of kicks and punches

"Its that redhead chick!" Iggy shouted before ducking to avoid a kick to his face. "Look, im sorry about the way I acted, i was alittle ticked of, I should have realized you were right ok? I mean *Dodge* Im *parry* really *block* sorry *block*
"Thats NOT WHY IM DOING THIS, MURDERER!" Marla said before trying to blast iggy away witha gust of wind
"Murderer? I murdered who?" Iggy asked before protecting himself form a gust of wind taht would cut through steel
*Impossible! he blocked that harsh a wind with his bare skin! He's INHUMAN! and is he really sincere about not knowing who murdered my friends?*
*before the two could get a chance to clarify things, a large freak with blue skin and red eyes stomped onto the scene*
"I see you two are fighters..........are you worthy enough to fight the RAMUS? OR shall you die?

Marla stood scared stiff *That thing....is the creature those two old men were talking about......he's the killer*
DIE WENCH! the large blue creature said before swinging his fist at Marla, ready to squash her
*OMG OMG OMG IM GONNA DIE IM SO SCARED I CANT MOVE* was all marla thought before noticing a few seconds later she was safely five meters away from teh fist. She looked up at her savior and it was the strange guy in the robes
"Why did you save me?"
"I'll tell you after I kill this BLASPHEMOUS BASTARD

[Froggy]

*Marla watches the stranger walk to fight that monster wondering: "how can he NOT be scared? And if he's not the murderer, but is the ramus, and so is he........then whats goign on? guess i'll let him handle this"

Igneel, looks up at the monstrous beast, and the beast replies "So the little warrior wannabe wants to be crushed eh? Let me show you the TRUE MIGHT OF THE RAMUS! GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH was the monsters battle cry as he swung wildly at Igneel.
Igneel in returned dodged the blows, while saying nothing to the monster

Marla took some more mental notes. "He really is fast! Hes dodging that creatures blows like it was nothing"
*then she hears two familiar voices behind her*
"Yepp, I reckon that boy dere gonna finally be teh one to beat taht thar monstroisty"
"Yea, i betcha"
"GAH! THose two old men again! wont they leave me alone! I can get away from them with my wind powe......o crud....the time limit was over...she couldnt keep the higher beings such as gods for more than thirty minutes, and she used the first twenty getting to this town, and the last ten in what just happened! CRUD!
back to the fight......
"WHY CANT YOU STAY STILL SO I CAN HIT YOU!?"
"NOt as easy fighting someone whos on a higher level than you is it, you FOUL BEAST?
"SHUT UP! *The creature throws his large fist at igneel, which igneel grabs with one hand* YOU. *throws the monster up in the air* ARE FINISHED! *jumps up and hits the monster back down into the ground. "Get up, i'm not finished with you yet"
Grrh.........ILL CRUSH YOU! was all the foul monster said as he got up, roared, and tried to swipe at igneel, to which igneel replied with a punch to the gut, that knocked the wind out of the monster
"AMAZING! HE knocked the wind out of that monster.......He must not be all that bad"
"So....you're the foul creature these old men said murdered in the name of ramus.......in my own brothers name.........you have murdered and claimed the atrocities you comitted are his...do you repent for hwat you did?
YES YES I DO IM SORRY.....DONT HURT ME HUMAN was all the creature would say witht he tears in its eyes
*So that monster DID kill my friends, glad he made that bastard pay*
"Ok then....get out of my sight........beings like you disgust me!"
*the monster then promptly ran away, then turned around*
LET YOUR GUARD DOWN FOOL!
Igneel replied in a loud shout! NO YOUR THE FOOL! and clasped his hands together, as a red beam came out he shouted
FIST......OF RA!, leaving a trail of smoke and ashes in front of him
"MY HEROOOOOOOOOOOOO!"
"what" was all igneel could get out before marla wrapped her arms around him "Get off me!"
"well fine.....but I have a question. You're name isnt reall Ramus is it?"
"well.....no. It's a long story............"
"O so since that guy or you wanst ramus...where IS ramus?"
*igneel points to the sky*
"Ohhhhhh. So what IS your real name?"
"Igneel Jones"
"Igneel Jones, Marla Maxis" she says extending her hand, which Igneel shakes
"So Igneel, can I call you iggy? Marla asks
"What? NO that sounds stupid!"
"aww but its soooooo cuuuuute Iggy"
"Gah Leave me ALONE! he says before walking off
"WAIT! I NEED YOUR HELP!

[Froggy]

*Ramus awakes, in the spirit world, at the bottom of some stairs, with a little green thing talking to him*
"HEY YOU WAKE UP!"
GAH! was all ramus shouted as he was freaked out by the green thing and thrwe a punch then pulled it to ask "where am i?"

"You're dead silly. My name is peter, and i'm here to inform you of your new position"

"What would THAT be?"

"well seeing as how you were the top fighter when you were alive, your talents have gotten you recognized by the almighty spirit king, and he wants you to join his seraphim."
"His seraphim>?"
"There like his royal guard. You should be honored kid. Heard you're a fighter, land this gig and you'll be able to fight as much to your hearts content"
"well....ok"
"plus i heard you get a special wish from the guardian himself"
Ramus, knowing what his wish would be (give his brother that last fight) said to peter "You've sealed the deal my MAN!"
"Ahh but first, you must make it up these stairs. these stairs stretch for over twice the lenght of the planet you lived on...........if you can make it without giving up.......then you shall join his royal guard"
"*Ramus looks up at the stairs, and smiles* This'll be no prob at all! See ya later peter!
"either that kid is THAT good....or that NUTS!"
*meanwhile Iggy and Marla talk*
"What do you NEED ME for?
"Well Igg...I mean IGNEEL, I need a bodyguard for my trip."
"What trip?"
"y'see, im going to rescue my mother from my father. My father, is a shaman like I am, cept he seems to have turned to darkness, and i wanna rescue him, but he doesnt want to be rescued. I'll need help rpobably, and after seeing what you did back there......i'd like you to be my bodyguard"
"Well....alright"
*Marla jumps up in excitement*
YAY! WERE GONNA HAVE SO MUCH FUN ALOGN THE WAY IGGY! you dont even know!
*the two old men lean against a building and watch the two leave the town*
"Dagnabbit that boi luckay! saves the day, gets the girl, its like fate is smiling upon him"
"Yea, he gets the girl, and I get that five dollars of gin you owe me cleofus"
"man i dont owe you jack"
Igneel turns to marla as they walk "you hear something?"
*marla turns back to see the old men fighting* "No...nothing, lets just keep moving
O, ok, thanks
*Back in the psirit world, a large being, more than ten feet tall, checks in with the head of his royal guard* "So I heard peter found a new recruit. Kid's awfully young to be here"
"He died of a disease, but its ok, disease means nothing here, fighters are allowed to truly excel in the afterlife, limitless years of training" Said the captain, a woman with dark hair, brown skin and a slim body. "He was the strongest fighter in his time period"
"You werent that shabby yourself Lina"
"Yea, but peter says he started the way up the stairs yesterday and that he's halfway done,"
"AND HES NOT TIRED?"
"no......apparently he's just really hungry"
*Cut to Ramus, with hand over stomach* "i'm almost there.....but MAN im hungry....ehh its only halfway to go......i'll eat when i get there! *gets back to running*
"THATS AMAZING" the spirit king said, clearly impressed "You might have some competition now Lina"
"See sir, I told you fresh meat is always a good thing......but actual competition? the boy just died. I've been training here for 200 years since i've died, I AM the best"
"Well why dont you challenge him when he gets here?"
"Maybe I will si...........*CLOMP* is heard outside the door of the spirti kings office
"Could that be......him?
*Lina and the spirit king walk outside and notice the rest of the royal guard staring at ramus*
"Ey, newsoul, you ok?" Said a slim man with silver hiar, and a staff as he poked at ramus skull
*Ramus puts his hand up* I'm fine......just......i'm hungry.......REALLY hungry
"THEN YOU SHALL BE FED! CONGRATULATIONS! YOU HAVE COMPLETED THE TEST TO BECOME ONE OF MY ROYAL GUARD!
"can we talk about this after I eat?
"HOW about AS we eat?"
"brilliant...........*starts eating*
"So now that you're one of my royal guard, Ramus Jones, you must now know your job"
"ahh the little green guy told me"
"and you listened? thats a first"
"it is? I kind of figured people usually gave that guy mass respect, he seems nice"
*Spirit king looks at lina* So why didnt YOU listen to him lina?
"I was too busy, y'know, FREAKING OUT THAT I WAS DEAD!
*Ramus in between sips of his sodas* Who're you?
*Lina extends her hand* Lina, Leader of the spirit king's royal guard, and your new boss.
"COOL! yOu must be pretty strong then!
"Blushes* "Well thank you. After your'e done here, get Shin, the man with the white hair, to lead you to your room, and you'll have your gear
*meanwhile back on earth, Iggy and marla are walking, and marla is tired*
*marla thinking to herself: Gah, how does this guy KEEP up walking for soooooooooo looooooooong? we've been walking for six hours straight and no stops, it's INSANE!* I'm TIIIIIIIIIIIIRED! marla pouts as she drops to the floor on her knees. I want to stoooooooooooooop somewhere!!!!!!!!!!
"Already? we've only been walking for six hours?
"ONLY!? WHATS WRONG WITH YOU?"
"im not a wimp thats what's apparently "wrong with me" he shrugged
"OOOOOH YOU! Marla shook her fist at iggy" Please can we stop somewhere Iggy? *she gives him the puppydog face
"Gah....MUST re......SIST! ehh.....ok....I guess we'll stop in the next town*picks marla up, and jumps towards the next town*
HOW COME YOU DIDNT DO THAT BEFORE!> a engraged marla asks
"You never asked? said iggy. "alright, lets stay in that hotel.......
*inside the hotel* AND THATS WHY I! GARN OF THE ROYAL KNIGHTS, AM THE GREATEST MAN ALIIIIIIIVE!
as iggy and marla check into the hotel, they overhear garns loud self*
"Aww iggy, i'll never be able to get any sleep......Iggy?
*iggy is sleep like a rock, on the floor*
IGGY! GET UP! Marla shouts as she kicks him in the ribs
"Whats wrong? i was having a good sleep too"
"I need you to take care of all that noise downstairs for me"
"WHy? THose people didnt bug me, why should i be mad at them?" Igneel says before falling asleep
"Gah! Fine, il handle it myself! *stomps down the stairs* People want to keep me up all late......HEY!
*the room full of knights, with garn at the head, stare* WHAT IT DO WENCH?
"SHUT UP! I'M TRYING TO SLEEP!"
"Ahh come on garn, this be one chick, we gonna let her spoil our fun"
"naw but gentlemen we've had enough fun for today, be good time for us to hit the sack....*saunters over to marla* though i'd LOVE to bring a guest....such as you
*pushes garn's hand away* NO, you drunken selfcentered jerk!
"but baby........woman LOVE THIS JERK!
"HRRRGH! was all marla managed as she walked off *Just be glad you'll be able to sleep was all she said*
*meanwhile, in the spirit world, Shin gets ramus ready for his first day*
"ALRIGHT NEWSOUL, come out here lemme see how hyou look!
*ramus walks out, decked in a white suit* what do you think?
*Shin squeals in excitement* YOU LOOK FABULOUS! COme on les go show bosslady. *pushes him towards LIna* And btw, im not gay, I just LOVE fashion
Lina giggles as he walks off "A metrosexual spirit, who'd have thunk it huh? Well new guy, ready for your first day on the job?
"Sure, what do I have to do?
"Quell a demon riot *points below them, at the lowest area underneath the stairs* but dont worry ill be there to.....help you? is all she asks before noticing ramus diving headfirst into the fight
"THIS IS GREAT! was all he said while feeding several demons knuckle sandwiches, and feet to the face* COME ON BOSS, DONT YOU WANNA JOIN IN!?
*Lina smiled* "you're getting on my good side newbie! she says as she dives down and slams a fwe demons into a crater

[End of Time]

some quick feedback...

- Sound effects, they don't work for me personally. No BOOOOMs for me.
- Acronyms that aren't really official, they seem out of place when you actually write them out in a story and in dialogue. Things like BTW
- use the tab-key, or some spaces when a character begins to speak, or leave a line between dialogue.

"David! I can't believe what you just did," Marge screamed, her voice drenched with hysteria, "you've killed him! He's dead! Oh my god, this isn't happening! This isn't real!"

"Be still Marge, screaming won't bring Pooples back!" David responded coldly.



"You can't be serious, you mean to say you've crossed the interdimensional barrier last night?" his mother asked him shyly.

"I sure did mom," Timmy boasted, "dad'll be proud of me, won't he?"

"But Timmy, honey, we adopted you when you were still a baby!"

[Froggy]

some quick feedback...

- Sound effects, they don't work for me personally. No BOOOOMs for me.
- Acronyms that aren't really official, they seem out of place when you actually write them out in a story and in dialogue. Things like BTW
- use the tab-key, or some spaces when a character begins to speak, or leave a line between dialogue.

"David! I can't believe what you just did," Marge screamed, her voice drenched with hysteria, "you've killed him! He's dead! Oh my god, this isn't happening! This isn't real!"

"Be still Marge, screaming won't bring Pooples back!" David responded coldly.



"You can't be serious, you mean to say you've crossed the interdimensional barrier last night?" his mother asked him shyly.

"I sure did mom," Timmy boasted, "dad'll be proud of me, won't he?"

"But Timmy, honey, we adopted you when you were still a baby!" Thanks for the feedback, seriously

[Froggy]

Back at the hotel, in the afternoon, marla wakes up to a empty room*
*YAWWN* "huh whats this? Iggy left a note? "Dear marla, i've gone to get myself some food, for free instead of paying for the hotel food"
"pfft, figures. Broke ass fighter not wanting to pay for food..ehh i'll just go out to the town to eat something!"
*gets up and walks out the door of the hotel. upon walking out she notices a very lively restaurant*
"That place seems fun i'll go there! As soon as she walks in, she notices someone she saw from last night......"Aww great, its that GARN guy.....les hope he's not a total drunk right now....best i can do is just stay out of his sight! she thinks to herself as she walks over to a lone table.Soon as she sits down she sees a wiater coming over to her. THe waiter mentions "Three drinks ordered for the fair lady, by the glorious one known as garn. "Did he pay you to say that as well?" The waiter just nodded his head and walked off
*Meanwhile down near a river close to the town, iggy is in the forest,fighting a bear*
"Alright you big furry bastard, come to PAPA! *iggy leaps at the bear*
"WTF" was all the bear could get out before iggy klocked it on the head
"Igneel Ignatius Jones always gets his bear meat"! He shoust before running off with the bear over his shoulder"
*back at the restaurant things get a little.....akward for marla, as Garn saunters over*
"HEy baby....how'd you like to get to know a royal knight better?
"i'd love to..........could you introduce me to one?"
"WENCH! I AM ONE!"
"I know, but I meant a REAL ONE, not a loser like you!"
"LOSER! WHY IM THE GREATEST OF ALL THE ROYAL KNIGHTS! Criminals and monsters TREMBLE IN FEAR AT THE FIRST MENTION OF MY NAME! THEY HEAR THE LAMENTATIONS OF THEIR WOMEN IN MY GRASP!
"Well, sorry.....but i dont believe you. I know someone who's stronger than you are"
"HAH! you're a funny one" He says as he leans in closer
"no, I truly believe he could beat you, he's incredibly strong."
"well see, if i beat him tho, YOU'RE MINE!
"I THINK NOT! I call upon the spirit of....APOLLO! *her eyes light up* Your done now asshole
*Garn laughs* O AM I?
*marla grins* YES! now FRY! *marla tries to fry him..and when she does.....he's still standing* GAh! how come you're still standing?
"Thats cause i'm THAT HAWT! *his eyes light up* literally
*meanwhile Igneel is running back into town,runs past the restaurant, stops then backpedals to see marla screaming*
"Ok, so as her bodyguard, if shes screaming, im on the job. *Tosses the bear in a alley* I'll eat you later! Igneel states before walking up to the restaurant and kicking down the door. "MARLA! IM HERE TO SAVE YOU!"
Marla screams "IGGY! MY BOYFRIEND! He'll kick your overly-egocentric-ass!"
Igneel, freaked out says "Boyfriend? what are you talking about????"
"HAHA! SO YOU DID LIE! So THIS IS THE MAN WHO WILL KICK MY ASS? *looks iggy up and down* Why do you wear so many robes, and why're you at HER beckon and call? Shes YOUR WOMAN, she should be at YOUR beck and call!
Igneel, obviously angry states: "SHES NOT MY WOMAN!
"Well I guess she can be MINE THEN?
"IGgy, just help me out here, I keep trying to tell this guy im not interested, but he wont listen."
"Why should i care?"
"One you're my bodyguard, two....this guy thinks you're a punk, and three....he said if he beats you im his wench!"
"HE said I"m A PUNK!?
Marla nods
"OK.....THATS IT! *iggy cocks his fist back*
"What the.......is all garn could get out before being knocked through a wall.
"ATTACK A ROYAL KNIGHT WHILE HE's DOWN EH?
"heh.....he wasn that strong"
"Thats cause, I don't have my gear! which I shall retrieve NOW! Garn then pushes a symbol on his palm,a nd some red knights armor appears on his body, with a flaming sword in hand.
"Ready for round two, FOOL?"
"O yes......O YES"
*Meanwhile in the spirit world......Ramus meets the rest of his coworkers after his first day on the job*
"Good work newbie, I guess since you're official now i can introduce you tot he gang" Lina smirked. "You already met shin" Pointing at the silverhaired fashion freak of a spirit.. Next up was a pair of twins, one male one female, "This is may and maynard, the twins". *the twins wave at ramus* Hi *ramus waves back*. Next up is Alexander the strategist, and one of the youngest to join the group! *she has a little boy step up*
"How...how did yOU Die?" ramus asks a bit taken aback......."you look like you're only nine"
"I was ten actually when I died. War raid, my village was burned to the ground, ashes were all that was left"
"O....well GLAD to meet you guys, and to know i'll be working with hyou......"
*the group smiles at him*
*meanwhile back on earth*
"GAH! HAVE AT THEE FOUL SCOUNDREL! Garn shouts as he charges Igneel,
"IGNEEL WATCH OUT!"
"MARLA IM NOT BLIND I CAN SEE HIM*grabs garns sword* that it?
"heheheh NO! READY TO FEEL THE BURN!? *he then heats his sword up, and his armor, causing fire to encircle it" I AM NOT THE AVERAGE KNIGHT, I AM GARN, THE ROYAL KNIGHT AND MASTER OF FIRE!
*Igneel lets go fo the sword* HOT HOT HOT! *whle hes thinking how hot it is Garn blindsides him with the sword, knocking him into a house with a pool in it* Hah, THATS IT!? what a waaaaaaaaaaaste?
*Igneel gets up and swings wildly at him, with garn slinging his sword and missing and iggy hitting his armor*
GAH! everytime I hit him it burns, but he seems to feel the pain as well!
"Iggy I can help! LEt me summon a water spirit or something?!
"NO I HAVE THIS UNDER CONTROL!
"HAH FOOL NO YOU DONT! *garn then makes a slicing motion with his sword, on fire that sends a fireball at iggy*
GAAAAH is all iggy says before bieng knocked back again
"ONCE AGAIN I AM VICTORIOUS!. BETTER GO BACK TO THE HOTEL WENCH AND GET READY, FOR I SHALL "ROCK YOUR WORLD!"
uggh was all marla could say before she felt a blur pass by. "Iggy"?
*Marla and Garn then hear a *DRIP* sound, and
Garn sees Igneel charging back at him, squeezing his hands*
"LETS SEE YOU FLAME ON NOW!
"HAH FOOL! I CAN DO IT ANY......time?" *Garn notices his hands are wet* AGGH! MY HANDS! HOW DID YOU KNOW!?
*Igneel smirks* "A friend of mine told me
*flashes back to watching his brother get ready for a match*
"Ramus, Ramus, you sure you can handle this guy? I mean he can use fire, he could seriously burn you."
"Dont worry little iggy, I got a plan"
"What is it?"
"well see dad and mom told me that these pyro guys, they cant work their fire mojo if two things happen. 1 is if there hands are covered by water, or if its too windy"
"So what you gonna do?"
*ramus busts out some water, splashes it on himself*
"go out there and win, thats what im gonna do"
*Back in the present, iggy gets ready to finish off garn*
"any last words? Iggy says as he's pounding on garn's armor, and stpeping back to deliver a knockout hit"
*marla thinks to herself "Wow....he IS strong, and clever too! he'll be a GREAT HELP!*
All I have to say.......fool....is GARN IS THE GREATESSSSSSSSSST! garn shouts as he gets knocked out of the town, over a mountain.
"Well now that THAT's done.....lets say we eat! My treat"
"OO, what is it iggy?"
*he goes into an alley, and pulls out his dead bear* BEAR MEAAAAAAT!
"excuse me for a minute, Iggy"
*marla goes near a trashcan and throws up*
"Not very ladylike marla!"
"SHUTUP!