second post...better I think

[brevitychaser]

Random..me trying to get better. Thanks for looking. Crits, comments?
http://static.flickr.com/35/120119880_34f8023fda_b.jpg

[TroyCarlson]

Oh yeah, this is MUCH better than your first post. This one feels a lot more solid to me. There are still some odd choices, though...the shadows on the breasts feel a little random to me...why would they shadows fall like that? Folds in the cloth? Then you need to indicate folds more. And I have a little trouble with the portion of the skirt where you can see her leg. I think the issue is that there is no shadow behind the leg...is there no skirt back there? It made me look a few times before I read that shape as a leg, even, because it didn't make sense to me that it would just be there with nothing behind it. Finally, if you are going to do such fantastic rendering on the rest of her body, you should go back in and re-work that right hand. It looks really flat and dull. not at all up to snuff with the rest of the pic.

Still, this is a great peice! You're really good! (LOVE the design of her dress)

[brevitychaser]

In my madness, I forgot that there is a back part of the dress. :p
Yeah, the hand gave me real trouble. This was just something for me to work through my blahness of the moment and I suppose I just hurried too fast with much of it. And i don't think I gave too much thought to a lot of things. Thanks for commenting. I'm trying to get better. And criticism like yours surely helps. I will definitely put more thought into my next endeavour. THANKS! :D

[Typo Lad]

That's not bad. Not bad at all.

Do you do sequentials or just pin-uppy stuff?

[Solaris]

In my madness, I forgot that there is a back part of the dress. :p
Yeah, the hand gave me real trouble. This was just something for me to work through my blahness of the moment and I suppose I just hurried too fast with much of it. And i don't think I gave too much thought to a lot of things. Thanks for commenting. I'm trying to get better. And criticism like yours surely helps. I will definitely put more thought into my next endeavour. THANKS! :D


Heh---I do that too! Once I did a unicorn, frontal view. Got it all nice, neat, polished, finished... then realized I'd forgotten to give it a tail.

:D

[brevitychaser]

Yeah, I didn't even notice until it was pointed out haha.
Yeah, I'm working on some sequentials. It's just so hard for me to stick with it because I'm so picky about so many things that I'll get half way done and just ditch the page due to my unhappiness with it. But I'm working on it. Researching etc..

[Lonewalker]

That truly is a better piece right there. As previously noted, there are a few things that could be fixed, but overall the piece has its goodness.

Keep up doing piece after piece to get more dexterity. ;)

[spazzy mcghee]

Troy hit it with the blouse. Define the wrinkles a bit more. The hair is awsome, it reminds me of my wife when she wears it down. =)

But I don't know if the hand is that big of a deal. The rest of her arm is clean with just the right amount of detail of a female figure. Maybe a wrinkle or skin line, but nothing major. I like this one as well. Good job. Keep them coming!!! =)

[icarus]

Very nice, her nose is a bit long though.